The_Hunter
1st June 2003, 10:16 AM
Well,here's my first post and story.
It's called,The Space Pirates.Crudy name,I know.Enough blahblahblah,and on with the Prolouge.
Proluge-
It was a nice day for Dave,a Pokemon Trainer who always just walked around.It was the year 2455.The World was as peacefull as it was.
But that was going to end.
The Space Pirates,a highly-intelligent species from Zebes,were mining on the moon,and no one knew about it.
The problem is,Dave had a small glass which he kept this material he found in a cave,which was called Phazon.
The Space Pirates,as intelligent as they are,found out that a huge chunk of it was underneath the Moon's surface a while ago,but to do that,they have to implode the moon,and mine from that,but their commander,the Omega Pirate,decided to hurl the asteriod torward the surface,and the moon with it.
They put some siesmic nucular bombs inside where they needed to split the moon.They set the timer for 4 days,and they got in their ships,ready for the blast.
4 Days Later.
"Ah,it's a beautyful,day,isn't,Typholsion?" Dave said.
Ty replied.He looked worried.
Ty was silent for a couple hours.
Then..
a huge *crrrrrrrrrrunnnnnnnnchh* echoed through the land.
Another *crunch*,and Dave looked up,only to see the moon in pieces.And it was falling down,FAST.
"What the heck is that?!?" Dave said to himself.
What he was seeing is the Space Pirate Frigate.It was damaged,but the other ships he saw where in pursuit.Both Ty and Dave went in their house,and dived for cover.A couple hours later,a huge asteriod,with blue specks on it,was falling torward the city below.
And then,it collided.A huge shock wave,followed by others,when the other pieces fell torward the surface,and then,he saw a couple of Space Pirates emerge from the ships landing.He then saw the Omega Pirate,and it was HUGE.When I mean HUGE,I mean HUGE.It was about 10ft tall at least.Another asteriod,which was being destroyed by SP Fighters,was blown into bits,and one part flew torward his house.
Moments later,Dave was knocked uncounsious,and then,dead.
His Typhlosion looked over his trainer,and moaned.He layed on top of him,and for who knows what,he bit him.Dave's blood spewed into Ty's skin.And Ty was hit by Phazon,and it sliped into his skin,too.No ones knows what happened after that,is that he fell asleep.
-End Proluge-
Is it okay,or good,or even great?
It's called,The Space Pirates.Crudy name,I know.Enough blahblahblah,and on with the Prolouge.
Proluge-
It was a nice day for Dave,a Pokemon Trainer who always just walked around.It was the year 2455.The World was as peacefull as it was.
But that was going to end.
The Space Pirates,a highly-intelligent species from Zebes,were mining on the moon,and no one knew about it.
The problem is,Dave had a small glass which he kept this material he found in a cave,which was called Phazon.
The Space Pirates,as intelligent as they are,found out that a huge chunk of it was underneath the Moon's surface a while ago,but to do that,they have to implode the moon,and mine from that,but their commander,the Omega Pirate,decided to hurl the asteriod torward the surface,and the moon with it.
They put some siesmic nucular bombs inside where they needed to split the moon.They set the timer for 4 days,and they got in their ships,ready for the blast.
4 Days Later.
"Ah,it's a beautyful,day,isn't,Typholsion?" Dave said.
Ty replied.He looked worried.
Ty was silent for a couple hours.
Then..
a huge *crrrrrrrrrrunnnnnnnnchh* echoed through the land.
Another *crunch*,and Dave looked up,only to see the moon in pieces.And it was falling down,FAST.
"What the heck is that?!?" Dave said to himself.
What he was seeing is the Space Pirate Frigate.It was damaged,but the other ships he saw where in pursuit.Both Ty and Dave went in their house,and dived for cover.A couple hours later,a huge asteriod,with blue specks on it,was falling torward the city below.
And then,it collided.A huge shock wave,followed by others,when the other pieces fell torward the surface,and then,he saw a couple of Space Pirates emerge from the ships landing.He then saw the Omega Pirate,and it was HUGE.When I mean HUGE,I mean HUGE.It was about 10ft tall at least.Another asteriod,which was being destroyed by SP Fighters,was blown into bits,and one part flew torward his house.
Moments later,Dave was knocked uncounsious,and then,dead.
His Typhlosion looked over his trainer,and moaned.He layed on top of him,and for who knows what,he bit him.Dave's blood spewed into Ty's skin.And Ty was hit by Phazon,and it sliped into his skin,too.No ones knows what happened after that,is that he fell asleep.
-End Proluge-
Is it okay,or good,or even great?