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    Default YuGiOh - Simple Beginnings

    Ok this is my first ever attempt at a fic (hence the title) and comes as im deciding which of my Real Life Decks to put some effort into so i thought it would be interesting to have a Duel between them.
    I have 'borrowed' the format a little from Dark Messiah (ie the main cards will have images as they are played etc) and it will be a 1 off so no further chapters.
    The Duel wont be great and im not that good a writer but ill see what i can do.

    Simple Beginnings

    "Are you ready to do this?" a voice rang out in the darkened room.
    "The question is, are you" another voice answered. Despite the poor lighting, the sense of being in a large room was evident due to the way the voices seemed to echo all around.
    With a sudden flash the lights in the arena switch on and everyone in the stands shielded their eyes. Everyone except the two young men standing facing each other on the duelling platform, slowly shuffling a deck of cards each.

    Another voice seemed to ring out of nowhere as the announcer declared the battle.
    "All right Ladies and Gentlemen.." it began, sounding way too overhyped as most announcers were "...today we have Drake..." he pointed to the young man to his left, dressed in a black t-shirt and jeans with messy brown hair "..Vs Kai.." he continued, pointing to the Blonde Haired guy in what could only be described as Casual combat fatigues.
    The announcer seemed to laugh to himself, trying to emphasise the excitement and pump up the crowd. "This will be a one fall all out Duel. Winner Takes all just the way it should be!

    The Two Duelists both smiled at this and handed the decks they had been shuffling to the refferees. As per the rules of the game for any official duel they were required to shuffle each others decks and with that done they would be ready to go. Both pressed buttons on their gauntletted wrists and the Duel Disks extended.
    Both competitors stared at eachother coldly as the announcer nearly popped screeching "Its Time To Duel!

    8000 vs 8000

    Drake was deemed to have won the toss and began his first move. A thin smile crept across his lips and he sighed simply placing 2 cards face down. 1 Monster, the other a Spell or Trap card.
    "Your turn" he said simply grinning at Kai
    Kai began to laugh, throwing his head back as Drake's smirk fell from his face. "Whats so funny?"
    "Nothing..." replied Kai "...it just seems so wierd us being so damn serious" Drake shook his head, urging his opponent to get on with it as Kai finally looked at his hand and copied Drakes opening move, 1 face down monster, 1 face down M/T.
    "Your Turn" Said Kai, obviously trying to imitate the serious tone of Drake

    "First you treat this as a joke, and now you play boring and just copy me?" Drake sighed drawing another card.
    "Enough of this hiding crap anyway, Lets do some damage!"
    He pulled a card from his hand and placed it face up.
    "I play Masked Dragon! (1400/1100)" he said proudly. Kai sneered.
    "Damage with that?" he chuckled as a Red and white dragon materialised on the field with a screech.
    Drake smiled and pulled another card from his hand. "Not with that..." he said confidently ".but i needed a Dragon on the field to play this...Stamping Destruction!"
    The Trap Kai had set shattered and was sent to the graveyard as his life points too began to drop thanks to the double Effect of Drakes Magic Card.

    8000 Vs 7500

    "And now i flip my facedown Monster...Man Eater Bug! (450/600)" called Drake "which destroys your face down monster and leaves you open to attack"
    It was Kai's turn to smile now as his face down card was blown apart. "Not quite" he chuckled. "See what you destroyed was my Sand Moth. Normally it has a strong defence but a poor offence. Unless its destroyed while face down"
    "What happens then?" asked Drake, a little nervous.
    "it comes back.." said Kai simply "...with its stats reversed!"
    A card appeared in Kai's monster zone and a large brown monster with a humanoid body but a worm like head and leech like mouth rose and roared its arrival. (2000/1000)


    "2000 Attack?" Drake gulped "I guess i end my turn"
    "Ya think" smiled Kai confidently before drawing his next card.

    "I summon Breaker, The Magical Warrior! (1600/1000)" Called Kai and a figure appeared that looked similar to the Dark Magicin, but in Red Armour and armed for physical combat. Its attack instanlty rose to 1900 due to its effect if succesfully summoned.
    "Ill start by using Breakers effect to destroy your trap.." The new monster immediately began to glow and pointed its sword at Drakes trap card. A beam of light struck it and it shattered as Breakers attack was returned to normal.
    "..and ill finish by attacking both of your monsters"
    Both Breaker and the Sand Moth lunged forward attacking and destroying the Masked Dragon and the Man-Eater Bug as Drakes Life points began to drop

    6250 Vs 7500

    "Im sure your aware that by destroying my Masked Dragon...." Drake began
    "...That you can Search your deck for a Dragon with 1500 attack or less and add it to your hand, yes i know" Kai Finished.
    Drake mumbled at how cocky his opponent was getting as he found the card he wanted and placed it in his hand.
    "and that will end my Turn" said Kai with a smile. happy that he was starting to get on Drakes nerves.

    Drawing his card Drake wasted no time in playing it, the Gracefull Charity Magic card which lets him draw 3 new cards before discarding 2.
    "Its about time i put you in your place" growled Drake placing 1 monster on the field "I play Red Eyes Black Chick (800/500) and immediately use its effect and Sacrifice it to Summon my Red-Eyes Black Dragon! (2400/2000)"


    "...then i will Attack and Destoy Breaker with Inferno Fire Blast Attack!"
    The huge dragon roared and let loose a huge burst of red flame which incinerated the Paladin monster and dropped Kai's Life points.

    6250 Vs 6700

    "Your move" Drake Snapped. With his signature monster on the field he felt confident and watched as Kai drew his card.
    Kai seemed to study his cards closely, wondering what he could do with the immediate threat. It had always been his style to look at the bigger picture but right now the biggest thing he could see was an Angry Black Dragon.
    "Ill play Different Dimension Capsule" he announced. "It lets me remove a monster from my deck for 2 turns. After that it comes to my hand. In addition ill play 1 more face down M/T and a face down monster and then end my turn"
    Drake's smile was slowly coming back to his face. Kai was now going defensive and he liked that. He had him backed in a corner, working to counter while Drake made all the forward motion.
    "Starting to feel the pressure are we?" He neered when Kai didnt answer and simply stared at him.
    "Fine, ill set one M/T and attack with Red Eyes against your Sand Moth"
    As Red Eyes began to rear up Kai tapped the card on his Duel disk which rose to reeal itself. "Activate Gravity Bind!" he said flatly, happy to have slowed Drake down down who declared his turn over.

    Drawing a card Kai looked at his situation. It was possible to turn this around and win, but it needed the Trigger, his strategy wasnt even set in motion but it would be crushing when it was.
    "I play 2 more M/T's face down and end my turn

    "Well since i cant attack.." grinned Drake lifting a card from his deck, "..ill play a Magic Card. Inferno Fire Blast!"



    "what this means is i can hit your life points with Red Eyes full attack power by sacrificing my actual attack, but since you've done that for me theres no problem.
    Kai's life points once more began to drop, this time a full 2400 points were removed.

    6250 Vs 4300

    "and once again, im done" said Drake with a hungry grin. He could smell blood, if things kept going this way it would all be over soon. He looked at his hand, at the 2 cards that would win him the Duel.

    On the other side of the arena Kai drew his card.
    "Since this is the second turn since i played it my Dimension Capsule comes into play now" he declared
    On the field a card vanished and Kai added a card to his hand.
    "Ill end my turn by playing another Face down M/T"

    "Oh this is starting to get boring kai" called Drake from across the Arena. "I think its about time i start to finish you off.
    He drew his card and Grinned. "I play Lord of D. Which protects my Dragons from all your silly traps and i now Sacrifice my Red Eyes Black Dragon to play the most powerfull Creature in my Deck"
    On the field a man dressed in Ornate robes and Dragonbone armour appeared and folded his arms as the Red Eyes beside him erupted into bright red flames. The Sillouhette in the flames grew larger and a sense of forboding filled the arena.
    Drake began to Laugh "Come Forth Red Eyes Darkness Dragon (2400/2000), Let him see the Instrument of his defeat!"


    Kai smirked as he watched the beasts effect kick in and its Attack raised for every dragon in his Graveyard. Your forgetting you still cant attack.
    Drake grinned and held up a card and Kai sighed. "Of course, Space Typhoon" he mumbled as Drake played the card that would destroy his Gravity Bind.
    "My Lord will attack your face down card" ordered Drake and the Lord of D. Rushed forward and attacked the card which lifted to reveal a Gemini elf in defence mode which was destroyed
    "Now my Dragon, attack his Sand Moth and leave him wide open"

    "Its about time!" shouted Kai as the Dragon launched its attack. "Reveal Face down Cards Card 'Soul Absorption and Raigeki Break"
    "What are you thinking, Soul Absorption wont do anything and Raigeki break cant help you, you cant target my dragon while the Lord is here"
    "Who said im targetting your monsters" said Kai with a smile, discarding a card to activate its effect. Sand Moth exploded and vanished, leaving the Red Eyes attack now directly targetting Kai.
    The attack hit and Kai Physically stumbled and watched as his life points dropped. 3600 points fell off and Kai began to laugh.

    6250 Vs 700

    "Thats it..." said Drake. "...hes finally lost it. Hes about to lose and hes Laughing"
    "Im not losing.." replied Kai "..not any more, you just gave me the trigger. By doing more than 3000 direct damage to me in one attack i can play this"
    Kai flipped over his final face down M/T card, another Magic Card. This one showed a number of monsters cowering under a huge falling fireball.
    "I play....INFERNO TEMPEST!" he shouted and the fireball was recreated on the arena.



    Admid the Chaos Drake noticed his deck getting smaller.
    "Whats going on?" he shouted over the noise.
    "Inferno Tempest is removing our monsters. Everything in our Deck or our Graveyard goes out of play. All thats left is whats on the field and in your hand."

    Drake started to smile again "so your still one attack from defeat"
    "i was" stated Kai as he gestured towards the Life point counter. His points were now going up tremendously quick.
    "Thats what happens when you play Inferno Tempest with Soul Absorption on the field. I get 500 lp for every card removed from play, both mine, and yours.

    6250 Vs 17200

    "Thats Crazy!" Drake cried, knowing he as unable to block it. "I end my turn" he finished, hanging his head low

    Kai knew it, the win was close. He now had such an LP lead that if he could get rid of the Dragon he could use the traps in his deck, such as Graverobbers retribution to slowly drain away Drakes LP. But first he had a chance to do things more directly. After all his Different Dimension capsule had brought him the perfect monster for this occaision and had kept it safely in his hand away from Inderno Tempests power.
    "First off ill play a M/T face down and then ill do just as you have. Summon my most powerfull monster to the field.!

    He threw his head back, mocking Drakes pose from earlier.
    "Come forth...Gren Maju Da Eiza! ?/?"



    "What the hell?" shouted Drake "your strongest monster doesnt even have an Attack, its a goddam Question Mark!" His hand clenched above the Trap Hole he had been about to play however it was useless against anything with an attack lower than 1000.
    "How is this your most powerfull Monster?"
    "Because it has an effect" replied Kai. "It gains 400 Attack points for each of my monsters currently out of play which means it now has an Attack of 6000!!"
    Sweeping his arm dramatically to point at Red Eyes Darkness Dragon he ordered his monster to attack and a Clawed arm shot forward to destroy the creature.
    "Oh and by the way, since you lost the Monsters in your Graveyard your Dragon lost its attack Bonus" said Kai as Drake looked on unable to stop it.

    2650 Vs 17200

    "Your Toast in my Next attack" Kai Stated Bluntly before ending his turn.

    Drake drew his card, realising it could be his last and quickly played it to the field. "Swords of Concealing Light!" he shouted. "Your Gren Maju now goes into Face Down defence position, My lord can destroy it!"
    "Hmm, your right, nice move" said Drake with a shrug. "Guess i should play this last Trap i have set and end it. DD Dynamite!"


    "You Lose 300lp for every Card you have out of play" informed Kai
    "You Lose all your Life Points" he continued
    "You Lose" he ended finally.

    0 Vs 17200

    Drake slumped to his knees as the crowd suddenly erupted, cheering for the Victor. The announcer had reached a new level of annoying frenzy recapping the Duel and announcing the Result.
    Kai turned and began to walk down towards the exit admist the cheers. He looked back over his shoulder to see Drake still on his knees. Cards scattered around him.
    He shrugged, sighed, then headed for the exit. Behind him the arena lights were once again turned down. Darkness, filled only with the echoing cheers of the fans.

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    Ok hows that. I think i kinda got more into making the Duel work than doing anything literary such as Charachter building etc but its a first go lol. I usually just stick to RPG lol.

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    Wow...is it really that bad? lol

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    It's not that it's bad; it just needs more detail and description. And maybe a storyline - you shouldn't just have a duel; you need some explanation why the duel is happening. Who, what, when, where, why, and how - you gotta answer all those questions in a story, especially a one-shot like this so people will at least know what's happening. This is basically just a duel and a short before and after monologue (I know, that's the most basic description of almost any YGO fic chapter, but a little explanation couldn't hurt.); try adding some more details next time and you'll get more of a response, OK?

    But don't feel down, either - trust me, I'm still something of a noob at writing myself. I know, it isn't easy, but as time goes on, you'll get the hang of it - just try and incorporate something familiar into it. You RP? Use your experience writing RP posts to add more detail and thoughtfulness here and it'll become easier.

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    I have to agree with Blade here. The formatting is a bit off, but that's remedied. Also, who are these guys? I know you wrote a fanfic to test your two real-life decks, but it would be better if you could flesh it out into a story. Maybe have a backstory or something.
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