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    Default A Darken Past (Mature possibly)

    Prologue- It all Begins....

    By: Kiara Wellsome
    In the kingdom of Shadows wars raged and battles were won. Hundreds of people were killed and some taken hostage. Soldier's bodies laid everywhere on the ground; some in trees others just burned alive. Demons also lay on the ground bruised and beaten from the battles before. Swords clanked together as the war raged on. Those who where of great importance, stayed away from the battle and wars, their servants stayed with them as long as they could. Protected them as well. Seven intervals stayed locked in the towers of the castle, no one knew who they were for real. The only ones who knew who they were, was the mages that watched over them some while ago. They were the seven deadly sins. Placed on this earth to kill those who were evil and did one out of the seven sins. They were; Greed, Lust, Envy, Gluttony, Sloth, Wrath and Pride.

    They have been walking this earth for more than two thousand years. Their ancestors served the gods of the world, the gods used and abused them all, the males and females. But one day, one of the seven could not take it any longer, she awoke from her sleep and grabbed one of her brother's daggers, and went into her master's bedroom. She could smell the alcohol from the night before. She wasn't sure who else was in the bed with him. Probably one of the other seven. Shaking her head, she quickly dove by the god and slit his throat faster then anything ever. The other person that was in the bed with him rose up and glanced over. She said nothing, just looked over at her sister in horror. “Kylia! What have you done?!” She asked watching the man to the side of her gurgle on his own blood. Kylia smiled, and looked over at the other, “My sister, I just saved us…” “You stupid idiot! Now we all are doomed to what you have done.” She screamed, choking on her own tears. `Kilya, stop crying and bitching. At least we are free now…” “I don't care about freedom! I care for my damn life.” Kilya shouted. “Just because you're one of the deadly sins, Wrath. Doesn't give you the right in hell to kill anyone. A god for that matter.”

    Kylia smiled and shook her head, “Come you must go back to your own bed and you must sleep. You will be free once the guards find this son of a bitch in the morning.” Kilya's eyes filled up with tears once more, just thinking about dying killed her inside. Her own flesh and blood, a cold hearted murderer. No wonder they called her Wrath. She was truly an evil being fit to play the part of Wrath in this small world after all. The morning was only a few short hours away, and Kilya's heartbeat just sank deeper as Kylia left the room. Laughing and smirking. The next morning, like Kilya thought, came all to fast. She was sound asleep to be awoken by guards being tied and gagged. She glanced around seeing her other brothers and sisters being thrown out of their rooms and into the great hallway. Kylia was the last one to be thrown out of her room, of course she was smirking and laughing silently. It was her fault. She just killed one of the most important people in this whole kingdom. No one said a word since they were gagged, but even the guards didn't say anything, they just grabbed each male and female they threw out and coldly walked into the dungeons.

    This was it, her last days one this earth for a long time. Kylia walked silently to where she was to be tortured and beaten. The others waited and watched. Their sister getting stripped of her clothing and then beaten till she couldn't stand anymore. Kilya let out a muffled scream as her eyes filled with tears watching her sister, but she knew that she deserved it. No matter what, she deserved it. After Kylia was beaten roughly they took her into another room, which Kilya guessed, possibly to rape her body till she was dead. After her brothers and sisters had gone before her, it was finally Kilya's turn. She was scared and afraid of what would happen, but thanks to Kylia, she knew it would happen. Kilya stood there, watching the men around her strip her from her clothes. Silently to herself she began to sing a soft melody song she had heard when she was very little.

    Goodnight, sleep tight
    No more tears
    Goodnight, morning, I'll be there
    And then we say goodnight
    Dry your eyes
    Because we said goodnight
    And now goodbye
    We said goodnight
    And now goodbye

    Kilya screamed in pain as each whip smacked into her back hard. She felt something run down her back and chest, not wanting to open her eyes she already knew what it was. Blood. Kilya fell to her knees and sobbed more as each one of the men took a hit at her. Making her scream more. Finally, the men had stopped, roughly picked her up and threw her into another room. She lay on the floor, beaten and bruised already. Her pride had gone, so had her dignity. She didn't know what to do now, she just laid there and closed her eyes. Kilya felt someone else within the room with her, but she didn't want to move. Finally, it had gotten on her last nerve and she looked up… A tall figure stood there, looking down at her with his baby blue eyes. He looked tired, probably the guy who had raped the others. Kilya quickly sat up and started to move towards a corner, but she was too sore to do anything. Whimpering as she moved, the man before her knelt down and smiled. His smile was warm and soothing. Like he wasn't going to touch nor do anything to her, but why her? Had she been picked for something since the lord there had already bedded her? Kilya flinched each time the man took footsteps, they echoed in her ears. Don't hurt me please… she thought to herself silently.

    She felt the wall against her back; she could go no further. The man crouched down and smiled at her, his baby blue eyes were gentle, soft and soothing. “I won't hurt you…” It was like he had read her mind or something like that. Kilya watched his hands slowly, making sure he wasn't really going to hurt her. “My name is Xenon.” Kilya looked up, her face showed emotion. “You must be Kilya, Kylia's twin sister.” He said wrapping his arms around her. She shivered and nodded slowly. “Are… you the one who… killed them all?” Xenon blinked at her question. “Excuse me?” He asked, cocking his brow a bit. Kilya shrugged, “I just thought… that you… might…. Have….” She trailed off. Xenon chuckled and shook his head. “Oh, no I didn't touch the others. I was assigned to you and you alone my sweet.” Kilya blinked once more and started to sob once more; knowing that she would never be able to see her twin sister again. Her hands clenched tightly to Xenon's pant leg. “You going to live… don't worry about it. “He whispered softly into her ear. Kilya shot up and glanced at him. “Why? Why must I live and not my other brothers and sisters?” She asked placing her head back onto his chest and signing, closing her eyes.

    “Because, you were in the lords will to survive. You are the lord's favorite, even in death.” Xenon smiled, wrapping his arms around her and rocking slowly back and forth. Kilya was surprised. She was the favorite. Out of all those slaves that gave him what he wanted. She recalled that the lord once said, when she was only seven or eight; “If one of them does something of great peril, they all will die. No one shall survive.” Xenon's voice shook her out of her small trace. “Miss, would you like to come and live with me for a couple of years?” he smiled watching her closely. His features were amazing, his eyes were so, Kilya couldn't explain but they were moving. His upper body was very well built, along with his lower half as far as Kilya could feel anyway. Kilya’s hands brushed against his chest and felt the tightness of his muscles. Kilya looked back up at Xenon and nodded, “Yes, and if you wish I shall be yours forever.” Those words, it scared him. Then again it pleased him happily. “If that is what you wish… then that is what you shall be my love.” He whispered softly into her ear...

    (Also I would like to know which banner is better. ^^ )

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    Nice, ^^ I like it. ANd I already told you which of the banners I like.

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    Well at least someone likes it lol just kidding. Uh yeah im thinking about making another one.

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    That was a dark starting,with the killing of the man followed with the torturing. Wonder what would happen to Kilya and the other seven sins now that their master is dead. Very intiguing.

    Just a slight note, you could sort out the dialogues in different paragraphs. That way, it will be easier for reader to recognise who's talking what. A tweaking or two on that part could do good to the fic.

    And about the banners... Hm, both are good... But I think the second one is better than the first. When you say another one, do you mean another banner? It would be interesting to see another banner.

    This is quite interesting. A few stuff could be improve, but its quite decent. I hope you can keep writing. :smilie:
    Please take it easy~

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    This is how I write, I won't change much, but once I print it out and am able to edit it ONCE MORE then I will change it. And yes I ment another banner. I have it made and its up and running on my site for this and some other storys of mine.

    Deadly Sins

    Its the first banner. The other banner is pose to be for my other story that I might never finish, but yeahhh... Thanks for the suggestions. Even though thats how I write and how I was really taught how to write. ^^;


    I am working on the first chapter. I already have a page on paper and nothing written on the computer. Hopefully soon it will be up here and on my site. If it isn't up here, then it will be up on my site, so keep checking back.

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