A few years ago I started work on a long story, one that had been building in my mind for a few years and that I finally felt strong enough to start. I worked on it long and hard and got quite a bit done before school and other concerns forced me to take a hiatus from it until now. Going back to refresh my memory has been an interesting time and I'd like to share what I've done so far and then continue the story here. As I wrote the story to its current point, it was interesting to go back and see just how much better the later chapters were than the first as my writing got better and better as I went. I've attempted to clean up the earlier chapters as much as possible but I'm not sure if the difference is still noticable or not. Either way, I'm glad to present the Phoenix saga up until it's current point (I'll post a chapter each day or whatnot until I've gotten to there) after which I will attempt to continue the story from there, if only to satisfy myself. Comments, ideas, critiques, reviews, compliments, and death threats are all equally welcome.
The Phoenix Saga
Chapter One: Falling Into the Flame
The pain was not the worst part of dying, contrary to popular belief; rather it was knowing that my death would cause the continued suffering of a world that hurt the most. It had all happened so fast too, faster than I even thought possible. One second I was facing that dark being, and the next I was lying on the summer grass, my life bleeding out from under me. As the world faded out around me, something blocked the sun’s glare from my tired eyes, a bird of some sort. As darkness finally settled in, a beautiful song began playing, a song that brought back so many memories.
Light. Piercing light. Bright enough that it caused the youth to flinch even through his closed eyes. The young man groaned and turned over in his bed, the sheets ruffling around him as he sought some recluse from the light. A wisp of thought fluttered across the boy’s groggy mind, struggling to gain a foothold in his consciousness. For a brief second it caught hold, causing the youth to gasp and sit up straight in his bed. He looked at the sun for a second, realizing that in order for it to be shining into his window than it must be. No! Letting out a shout the boy threw his sheets back and dashed across the small room to the cabinet in the corner. Throwing the doors open he grabbed the clothes within and began to throw them on as fast as possible, all the while yelling at himself, “Caylen, you moron! Why can’t you just get up on time for once? If you get expelled, you’ll never become a Defender and then what?”
Dressed, the youth paused at the mirror to make sure that his uniform was on properly. Starting from his head, the boy’s eyes traveled down his body, past the black, sleeveless tunic, past the loose black pants, down to the black leather boots that finished the outfit. The tunic and pants were trimmed in silver and made of some tough material that felt like silk. The boots had a dull shine around the silver laces that showed both great care and wear. Nodding his satisfaction, the boy shrugged on his black coat, similarly lined in silver, around his shoulders. With a slight rustle, the boy dashed out of the room, slamming the door behind him.
I gave a silent laugh and was instantly sorry for it as the pain from my destroyed body shook me. Was my life passing before my eyes? How cliché. It was appropriate however that I was reliving this day that hard started out so badly and would only get worse.
The youth arrived shortly at the large courtyard in the middle of the complex in which he lived and trained. Shaped much like a spider with far too many legs, the training courtyard was the body of the Defender complex, the legs representing anything from living quarters to stables. The other Defender Trainees were already warming up, going through simple moves with their various training weapons under the early morning sky. Thinking that his absence had gone unnoticed, the youth turned to go to his position and rammed directly into the chest of an extremely large, muscled man. The youth took one look at the red shield, bordered by the shapes of many different magical animals, that was sewn onto the man’s well-worn and dirtied tunic and prepared himself for the worst. The hulking man looked down at the boy with his deep brown eyes and sighed, “Caylen Everstar! How many times is this now?”
Caylen mumbled something incoherent and closed his piercing green eyes, silently wishing that the Defender wouldn’t use his full name. The Defender frowned and leaned forward until his face was directly in front of Caylen’s, his hot breath warm on the youth's face and his gaze promising punishments better left unspoken, “I asked you a question…when a Defender asks a recruit a question, the recruit would be wise to answer”
Caylen gulped and responded, “I believe that this is the sixth time this month sir”
Defender Renault let out another heavy sigh and motioned to Caylen to take his position with the rest of the trainees. As the boy scuttled off to do Renault’s bidding, the Defender shook his head and muttered to himself, “So much promise.”
Caylen wandered over to a weapons rack, where he selected a wooden practice sword, essentially a bundle of wooden rods, and began going through a few warm-up slashes and jabs. Satisfied, he fell into a practiced stance, his left hand holding the blade at a downwards angle from ear height, the other held underneath the blade as if holding a shielf. For a moment Caylen forgot his embarrassment as he twisted and turned, dancing with his sword as he pierced half a dozen imaginary enemies in a few moments. Caylen had a talent for the blade, even his peers realized that, and as he flowed across the dusty courtyard others occasionally glanced his direction to observe his movements. His heroic battle was cut short however as he noticed something amiss. Slowly lowering his blade, ignoring the slight layer of sweat that had gathered on his leanly muscled frame, he glanced around at the other Defender recruits and noticed that many of them were visibly excited, or nervous, or some mixture of the two. Caylen knew that he must have missed something by being late, something important by the looks of things. He sighed; he would have to ask Weslyn, his best friend, about it later. He turned to grab another weapon from the rack and froze. Slowly he blinked his eyes, thinking that he was seeing things, but when he opened them again HE was still standing there. Dressed in the shining silver armor that all Defender’s wore, complete with the shield-like crest, the man instantly stood out due to the fact that each and every crease or weld on his armor was trimmed with black, a decoration that the man had certainly earned throughout his amazing life and one that only marked the armor of the greatest Defenders in history. Caylen shuddered, as the man’s ice blue eyes, lightened even more by the sparkling rays of the sun that reflected of his armor and surrounded him in an eerie haloe ffect, seemed to focus on him for a second. The scalp under his short, spiky, black hair prickled as sweat suddenly beaded. “Hojira!”, Caylen’s mind raced, “What on Terra is HE doing here?”
Hojira, the one name that every Terran knew, the single greatest Defender to ever exist the said. His exploits were legendary: his defeat and binding of the Dark Guardian, his defense of Rearth against an the greatest incursion of the Trolls this century, his closing of the gate to the Netherealm when the undead invaded, the list went on and on and Caylen knew each and every honorific that Hojira had earned. The youth practically worshipped the still youthful Defender.
It took a moment of stunned awe before Caylen realized that Renault was calling his students to line up in front of Hojira. Caylen scurried to the front of the line, shoving past several of his fellow recruits in the process, so that he could better see the famous Defender. After getting the recruits lined up, Renault began to march in front of them, obviously nervous himself, and began to speak, “Recruits, today you will be observed by Sir Hojira during your drills and sparing. Sir Hojira is looking for recruits who show great promise and who could one day be chosen to become bonded to a Guardian.”
Caylen tuned out the rest of the speech, which was essentially a long pep talk, and pondered the first portion of it. Bonding a Guardian was the reason that most of the recruits joined in the first place. The ability to bond to a mystical beast was the key to the Defender’s magical powers, powers that no one else possessed and that made the Defenders such an important force in Terra. very few were chosen to wield that power. Bonding took a great deal of mental and physical energy and if a Defender was not up to it, the Bonding could be fatal. Caylen’s attention came back to the here and now as Renault began to wrap up his speech and Hojira began to walk down the lines of recruits.
The legendary Defender stopped periodically and stared into the eyes of a couple of the trainees. Those that he looked at seemed to become frozen under his gaze, sweat visibly dripping down their faces and their bodies shivering as if a sudden chill had come over them. After starring at a recruit for a while, Hojira would raise one hand and Renault would rush forward to lead the frightened recruit to join the others whom Hojira had chosen. Caylen stiffened as Hojira neared him and almost cried out as he seemingly walked straight past the youth. Suddenly however, Hojira stiffened and turned back to Caylen. Caylen seized up and began to sweat and Hojira stared at him, this time with a vaguely curious look on his face that quickly evolved into something akin to disbelief.
Hojira’s hands flew up to touch Caylen’s head, one on each temple. Hojira stared straight into the boy’s eyes and whispered to him, “Don’t move. I must see something”.
Suddenly Caylen felt as if thousands of small hands were reaching into his head, pushing around like they were searching for something. The feeling was odd to say the least. As the hands raced across his brain, Caylen felt something inside of him react. Hojira flew backwards, landing roughly on the ground of the practice field and throwing up a cloud of dust as he skidded several yards. The Defender stood, brushing dirt and debris off of his shining armor, and nodded at Caylen. Renault slowly guided Caylen over to the group of chosen ones, sputtering to himself as they passed several awestricken recruits (including a few whom had fainted). As they walked, Caylen heard Hojira’s voice in his head, “I will be watching you with great interest. Your power is...odd”
For a bit of clairity, Caylen is about 18 years old. The largest obstacle I had while going back to revise is adding detail to the work, my writing was very straightforward, up until a certain point when I began to enjoy detail work more, which works well in a lot of cases yet leaves some of the older sections seeming a bit dry. I hope the additions worked for the first chapter which truly needed the most work of all of them.