Doom, eh? I got the hint at the guns and demon. Sent to hell? Scary.

Well, the characters here are not properly described: who was the main character? I'm guessing its the main player of Doom 3. You did say that this was adapted from Doom.

There were a bit of grammar mistake. There were some part where the commas are not put.

Again, the voice this time it’s muffled

You could improve by:

Again, the voice. This time, it’s muffled

Well, that was my opinion, anyway. I'm guessing that this is a one shot fic? Well, anyway, this fic could be expanded. I'll see if there's any update for this fic. See you later! :smilie: