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13th March 2004, 10:33 PM
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Elite Trainer
Lessons to be Taught
The cliffhanger's not bad. I like the background stuff (i.e. Becka's past), but maybe a few hints as to what it has to do with the rest of the story could help build the suspense. The description of Pewter City was nice; never imagined it that way before, really.
Keep it up!
mistysakura
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