Poetry Corner

[Lulu]

Own choices of course,Free will is so important!

[PancaKe]

Thats cool. Just another question out of curiosity - if you gave peeps their own chocies, dont you think some of them would do the wrong thing and abuse their free choice? im being so dificult arent i

[Lulu]

Well.............um......Every year everyone would have a brain scan and If there were traces of them going to do something evil they would put them in jail.NO MORE QUESTIONS!!!

[PancaKe]

Awww why not??? I wanna ask questions.

Anyway this is a poetry corner - no more discussions.

There once was a fuzzy wuzzy bear
But fuzzy wuzzy had no hair
Fuzzy wuzzy wasn't very fuzzy wuzzy, was he?

[Leon-IH]

What are we all
Why do we fade
Back into a wall

Now your gone
I saw you once
Flew as a swan

Down on earth
Alone we begin
What it's worth

[DannyBoy]

Hey, im back with some more songs that im hoping to get recorded soon, so here are some.


-Tonight-


Can you?
Breathe with me,
Tonight
Can't help when you,
Talk about me,
With your friends
NO fight
I know that things may be bad,
I kno that I will try and be back,
I am everything I can be
I may not be strong
But I know how to handle things
Can you hear me tonight


I am screaming for you,
Tonight,
I am waiting for you to,
Tonight,
One breath away from falling,
Tonight,
I am wating, I am waiting, I am wainting,
Tonight,
For you.

Lost echos in time,
Freeze frame a picture,
How does it feel knowing,
One day I will leave,
And never return,
It could be,
Tonight,
We have to make mistakes,
Just to learn,
How we mesh with differences
I kno that I am not that smart
I kno that we cna work it out
But I know how to handle things
Can you hear me tonight

chorus



La da de la, La da dea la,

Tonight, to breathe, to be with you
Tonight, to see, to feel you tonight
How does it feel, knowing someday I will leave,
Will you remember me as the way I used to be,
or Will you sit and grieve,
Or will we both be set free?

Chorus 2x

Tonight, I am waiting, I am waiting, I am waiting for tonight...



-Slipping Far Away-



Down, on my own without you,
Can't control, myself anymore,
My reflection shows me a fool,
Losing my mind as I land on the floor,
Its hitting me deep in the core.
Sometimes im so tired,
Always being lied to,
Exit, slipping far away!

Slipping far away,
Got nothing else to say,
I swear I wont be ok,
Don't want to remember today,
Head spinning as I lay,
Yes im slipping, slipping far away.

On my own isolated,
Always with my friends feeling alone,
Can't help being number one hated,
Talk all night on the phone,
Got no where else to roam.
Sometimes im so tired,
Always being lied to,
Exit, slipping far away!

Slipping far away,
Got nothing else to say,
I swear I wont be ok,
Don't want to remember today,
Head spinning as I lay,
Yes im slipping, slipping far away.

At home contraveral,
Speaker of many sins,
Skipping review rehersal,
Many losses, Many wins,
Can't help the way I am.
Sometimes im so damn tired,
Always being lied to,
Exit, slipping and slipping and slipping far away!

Slipping far away,
Got nothing else to say,
I swear I wont be ok,
Don't want to remember today,
Head spinning as I lay,
Got nothing else to say,
I swear I wont be ok,
Don't want to remember today,
Head spinning as I lay,
Yes im slipping, slipping far away.

Got nothing left to say,
Don't want to,
Can't make me.
Please just go away...



-Little bit Strange-

I know I may act wierd,
I know I can be, a little bit different,
I may be feared,
But everything I say I meant.
Things can get a little bit crazy,
But you will always be my baby,
Sorry but I can't give you my love.

I know things can get a little bit strange,
I cant help these feelings towards you,
But I cannot get close to anyone,
Your gonna get in danger,
But I don't want to be a stranger,
Things can be a little bit strange,
I know, things can be a little bit strange.

From the, very first time I set eyes on you,
I had this tingly feeling,
Trust me, I really do love you and that is true,
now, I am alone dealing,
Can't see you without pain!
Sorry but I can't give you my love.

I know things can get a little bit strange,
I cant help these feelings towards you,
But I cannot get close to anyone,
Your gonna get in danger,
But I don't want to be a stranger,
Things can be a little bit strange,
I know, things can be a little bit strange

I try my best,
Give you my all,
But in the end,
You may fall,
I can give you that call,
Its hurts me to see you hurt,
But thats the way it has to be!

I know things can get a little bit strange,
I cant help these feelings towards you,
But I cannot get close to anyone,
Your gonna get in danger,
But I don't want to be a stranger,
Things can be a little bit strange,
I know, things can be a little bit strange


-Friday -

Saturday, im tired as ****,
Sundays here and Im tired still,
Monday comes and im feeling it bad,
Tuesday happens and makes life miserable
Wendsday makes me remember what I had,
Thursday Im ready and full.

Friday Night,
Feelings alright,
Can't stop me now,
No matter how,
Hard you try im into deep,
Taking that great leap,
Its a friday night!

Hanging with my friends,
Driving in one of their benz,
Grabing life real damn high,
Moving my body down low,
Feeling so fly,
Can you feel my flow.

Friday Night,
Feelings alright,
Can't stop me now,
No matter how,
Hard you try im into deep,
Taking that great leap,
Its a friday night!

Oh.oh,oh,oh no one stoppin this ****,
**** it up and Ill throw a fit,
Stay on my good side,
Enjoy the ride,
Girl don't you hide.

Friday Night,
Feelings alright,
Can't stop me now,
No matter how,
Hard you try im into deep,
Taking that great leap,
Its a friday night!

-Boy-

There was a boy,
He felt so damn bad,
Never got things,
Always feeling sad,
Can't belong,
So he walked away.
Whats wrong boy?
Can't control yourself anymore.

He wants to run,
Hide form the pain inside,
But has no where to go,
So he runs and runs and he runs and runs and he run,
Poor boy.

Tired of being alone,
He picks up the phone,
But no ones on the other line.
Remains silent and hidden,
Till he finds a way to go,
He wishes this horror away.
Whats wrong boy?
Can't control yourself anymore.

He wants to run,
Hide form the pain inside,
But has no where to go,
So he runs and runs and he runs and runs and he run,
Poor boy.

Hes got to hide,
Hes got to be on his own,
Thinks of life,
Hes learned so much,
Not much on his own,
But alone in his mind.
THings will get better boy,

He wants to run back,
Knows hes not on his own,
Remembers life an't so bad,
Throws the phone,
Boy found his way.


-Could Happen-

YEAH, hey there, it could happen

Things are growing better each day,
Sitting in my room,
As I begin to dream of what to say,
Living life to the fullest,
Was starting to come true.

Yes there it could happen,
Live like its you last day,
Always have something to say,
Remember you gott be you,
Party it up now,
Yes there it could happen today!

Im in love,
and its the best thing for me,
Life is not lasting forever,
Lets be together now,
And not wait another second,
Full of life and beginnings.

Yes there it could happen,
Live like its you last day,
Always have something to say,
Remember you gott be you,
Party it up now,
Yes there it could happen today!

Life is short,
Love is forever,
Life is a gift,
But so are you,
Friends are memories,
but so is life,
It could happen anyday.

Yes there it could happen,
Live like its you last day,
Always have something to say,
Remember you gott be you,
Party it up now,
Yes there it could happen today!


-Im in love with you-

From the very first time we met,
I knew it was something,
But hard to recognize,
I been a stranger to this for some time,
Its hard to make up my mind,
But in the end im all for you.

Im in love with you,
You brought meaning to me,
The bond between us grows,
Heartbreak it more,
But in the end I have you there for me,
Im in love with you.

Can't control the things you make me do,
Love at first sight,
Can just be a blind fight,
Took a bit but I knew you were cool,
Taking it slow and moving on up,
Your sweet eyes and your flow.

Im in love with you,
You brought meaning to me,
The bond between us grows,
Heartbreak it more,
But in the end I have you there for me,
Im in love with you.

I'd do anything for her,
She'd do anything for me,
That what makes more than anybody else,
Can't help but to know,
Know that we could have it all,
And now we hae are sappy love song!

Im in love with you,
You brought meaning to me,
The bond between us grows,
Heartbreak it more,
But in the end I have you there for me,
Im in love with you.

-Can't Make Life Everything You Want It To Be-

IM so tired of the same **** day in and day out,
Can't help but to tell you all my feelings and what im all about,
You know, things about me I dont know and I sit and pout,
I can be serious even though I act like I dont give a ****,
Look now and see how Im running out of luck,
Damn, **** happens to make life suck,
Falling down and crawling back to the top,
Hope when im older I dont end with a mop,
Even though thats what most say!

Can't make life everything you want it to be,
To bad I am blinded by the light to see,
Only got the one who cares about me,
BUt feelings locked inside,
Life hurting outside,
Please wont you be by my side.

Motivated by your advice keeps me going,
Keeps my body and engery flowing,
Hope this relationship we have keeps on growing,
With that sweet talk of yours that you keep doing.
Falling down and crawling back to the top,
Hope when im older I dont end with a mop,
Even though thats what everyone says!

Can't make life everything you want it to be,
To bad I am blinded by the light to see,
Only got the one who cares about me,
BUt feelings locked inside,
Life hurting outside,
Please wont you be by my side.

Tired of waiting but I want to,
Want to be you one and only,
Can't trust my words,
Every single heard,
YEAH, YEAH, YEAH, YEAH!

Can't make life everything you want it to be,
To bad I am blinded by the light to see,
Only got the one who cares about me,
BUt feelings locked inside,
Life hurting outside,
Please wont you be by my side.

[mr_pikachu]

Here's a little poem I wrote. It's probably really bad compared to the rest here, but I like it.


A Trainer’s Quest


Darkness descends upon the land,
Showered in the fog of night.
The only light is in your hand;
You must go and win the fight.
Catch them, all of them, by the end;
You must triumph as a team.
Battle fiercely, and play to win;
It has always been your dream.

[PancaKe]

I dont know how you say
That he never existed
I dont know how you say
That its all a lie
Because what I know to be true
I could never deny

And you tell me all these things
That you back up all the way
You tell me all these things
Down my throat and in my face
I take them in but you'll never change
What I believe

Because Christ
has opened my eyes
and has shown me
That grace not works
Faith cant be earned
and he saved me
he took my death away
he suffered all my pain
because he loved me....
because he loved me....

I dont know what that is... dont ask...

[mistysakura]

No poem to post here, might write one sometime.

Anyway, m_p: Pretty good (I can't review poetry!), but line 7 broke the nice rhyming scheme, and since the whole thing has been more or less instructions/commands, line 8 looked a bit strange.

Tara: That was an interesting poem; "and has shown me That grace not works Faith cant be earned" didn't make sense to me though, although I got the gist of it. And about the subject material, don't know what happens where you are, but in my circle of people we don't try to change people's beliefs. We can debate religion, I do debate my views about Christianity and stuff, but it's not like we're trying to convince anyone that God exists/doesn't exist/whatever. By the way, how we can say that it's all a lie and stuff is because, well that's what we believe, and if you want your beliefs respected, you've got to respect our views too... yeah. End of rant.

[Bulbasaur4]

^^ Well... here are a few of my poems. I'd be extremely happy if you guys would tell me if you like them or what you liked or didn't like... well, you know. Critique-like ness. ^^;;

This first one is my favorite thus far. ^^;

We caper the intricate dance
Of wits, smiles and truth
We sing the complicated song
Of being flirts and aloof
Breathe
Take a lapse from the music


I smile the ever-lasting grin
With hope, pride and trust
I believe the spirited maiden
With memory and lust
Watch
Fleeting images take flight


You perceive the glittering reality
In body, soul and mind
You capture the exotic fantasy
In intuition and grind
Grasp
Truth will slip through fingers


We live the twisted life
Of soul, death and dancers
We love the vague lust
Of questions and answers
Realize
All webs will interlace together

This second poem is one that I wrote for a friend. She was having a hard time and she always thought that she was ugly or that she was undesirable and basically she was going through a depressing time.

More Beautiful

There are sundry people around you
They’ll always stop and stare
There are mumbles to follow you
As you clarify all of your flair
There are judgements upon you
And you pretend not to care

Here is just one solitary soul with you
Always looking your way
Here is a divine song to surround you
As you dance and sway
Here is sole tenet about you
It hopes you never stray

Fiery gazes
May singe your skin
Slitting declarations
May cut deep within

Ebony thoughts
May cloud your heart
Tempting ideas
May cause you to part

This solitary soul
Won’t let you start

There are baneful things upon you
That will endeavor to taint your mind
There are vile entities around you
To seclude what you find
There are scapegoats encircling you
Who try to deign you to their kind

Here is the unsullied alongside you
Who will bring you light
Here is ample compassion for you
Promising to hold you tight
Here is elutriated truth spoken to you
You needn’t be more beautiful for sight

This is a shorter poem I wrote... simplistic too. ^^

Trying to resurface,
I'm trying to break though,
But when my fingers reach the air,
Some one else pulls me down too.
When I need to be rescued,
No one is there to be found,
No one is there except nothing,
And nothing let's me drown.
I try to defend for myself,
But I'm lost with out a 'you',
So you can stay away from me,
But I'll try to be true,
You may not know how I feel,
But what I feel has a purpose,
May some day I'll tell you,
But I'm trying to resurface

Thanks for taking your time to read!

[DannyBoy]

And it was you

By: Dan M.

Ya know a crush can hurt in so many ways,
When you think about the person day after day,
When you try to speak a word yet you have nothing to say,
Staying silent and hurting is the only way,
Being with you would be the greatest thing for me,
But being alone is the only thing for me to be,
Everyone knows what I feel but you can't see,
I really like you a lot with all my heart.

And it was you,
That brought me to tomarrow,
And it was you,
That gave my life a moral,
And it was you,
That kept me sane,
And it was you,
Who kept me in the right lane,
I had a dream of fame,
And then you came,
And it was you,
That me want to,
Give up everything just to be with you,
Who kept me from turning blue,
And it was you...

You gave me a smile everytime we talked,
When we were outside taking a long walk,
Watching tv and movies,
You making me want to be,
Something more than I every though of,
Your like a white dove,
Sent from heaven to me,
I really like you alot with all my heart.

And it was you,
That brought me to tomarrow,
And it was you,
That gave my life a moral,
And it was you,
That kept me sane,
And it was you,
WHo kept me in the right lane,
I had a dream of fame,
And then you came,
And it was you,
That made me want to,
Give up everything just to be with you,
Who kept me from turning blue,
And it was you...

You are the one,
But am I your one?
This is no game,
Even though this may sound lame,
After the end things may never be the same,
I wanna be with you girl all night long,
We could do no wrong,
Sitting and talking about us,
Please baby no fuss,
I know its fast but may be love,
Things may get rough,
But we have to stay strong and tough,
To make it through,
And I like you a lot with all my heart!

And it was you,
That brought me to tomarrow,
And it was you,
That gave my life a moral,
And it was you,
That kept me sane,
And it was you,
WHo kept me in the right lane,
I had a dream of fame,
And then you came,
And it was you,
That made me want to,
Give up everything just to be with you,
Who kept me from turning blue,
And it was you...

[Tainted]

Haven't done poetry in a while. So, here's a few. Some really short, some medium length, etc.

For the Walking STD (And it doesn't stand for Super Trendy Diva)
When asked about life, I’d rather die
It’s twenty for deuce, it’ll make you fly
Forgetting the things that pass me by
Committing ideological suicide

Why can’t you breathe with my hands around your neck?
You try to gasp for air as my tightened grip prevents
As your body stops resisting, doped on E and crystal meth
I realize, to no surprise, I’ve lent another death

Untitled

Hello mister, dark-rimmed-glasses-toe
Sing me songs, tell me of your woe
Howdy mister, tell me this:
Why should I even give a ****?

And how do geeks redeem their low?
They buy black dye and let their hair grow.
They write ****ty poetry, all of it blows
And they call themselves a trendy emo.

Spider, Spider

Slowly as she weaves her web
She dangles down, a single thread
But as she turns, on legs of four
She finds her house of webs no more

Seeming Divinity

I’m your only alibi
I’m the reason Jesus died
I’m the car crash at the lights
I put the clouds in the sky

I’m your god, on your knees
Hands together, pray for me
I’ll strangle you until you can’t breathe
But in the end I’ll set you free

Left Alone with Wounds Full of Salt

Where are we? Are we lost?
Deaf children forgetting the cost
Little ones, without mind
Bodies wasted, without time

Another one, left alone
Feeble aching in the cold
Where were we? Where were they?
How far were we thrown astray

Like a deck of cards without the game
Like an orphan left without the pain
Blown to your fortune flows like the rain
Here just to **** on your parade

Singled out, once again
Left with nothing, without a friend
Now we’re here, now we’re there
Why are our wounds never fair?

Here we are, let us go
How could you sink down so low?
Let us be but let us through
Let us reach divine solitude

Like a deck of cards without the game
Like an orphan left without the pain
Blown to your fortune flows like the rain
Here again just to piss on your parade

Like a deck of cards without the game
Like an orphan left without the pain
Blown to your fortune flows like the rain
Here just to **** on your parade
Piss your parade
Spit your parade
**** your parade

Like a deck of cards without the game
Like an orphan left without the pain
Blown to your fortune flows like the rain
Has dug your grave if death must feign

Hyperactive Attention Deficit Disorder

Scream! You can do it!
Bite your tongue, right through it
Bleed it all some more
Still think you’re a whore

****! You can do it!
Pierce your brain, right through it
Drain out the unneeded
Victims become the impeded

Should I grab my shovel?
Dig right through the rubble?
Chip ‘way what’s just wrong
You were ****ed up all along

Hyper—Hyperactive
Hyper—Hyperactive Attention
Hyper—Hyperactive
Attention Deficit Disorder!

Strewn Apart, Pieces of Thrice

Here we are alone again
Me myself, this time not I
I was lost, he was a friend
Just me and myself left to die

You talk about yourself sometimes
All the while I fall inside
Why can’t I be just like them?
Who am I to recommend?

Me and myself, little ones
I’m so selfish, but there’s no fun
In being alone
When there can be more than me
And maybe myself

Here I am alone again
Me and myself past away
I am my only friend
I was spat from games to play

Pleading Crazy

Slit my wrists, condemn me a whore
Love to hate what you adore
And through my eyes, it’s you I see
Regretting things that were meant to be

Some day’s life stabs you in the back, that’s reality
Some days you want her at your side, that’s insanity
Some days you can only be passive
I’m pleading crazy to the masses

Hang myself out on the killing tree
Pick out a branch of insecurity
Some care to take the easy way out
Just what the hell is life all about?

Some day’s life stabs you in the back, that’s reality
Some days you want her at your side, that’s insanity
Some days you can only be passive
I’m pleading crazy to the masses

Can you not see? You have two eyes
Here I am you *****; I’m ready to die
You’ll never take me, despite all the bleeding
Can you not see that I’m knelt down and pleading?
All the while my insides are screaming
Telling me I’m a stupid **** forever believing

Some day’s life stabs you in the back, that’s reality
Some days you want her at your side, that’s insanity
Some days you can only be passive
I’m pleading crazy, pleading crazy to the masses

Some day’s life stabs you in the back, that’s reality
Some days you want her at your side, that’s insanity
Some days you can only raise a finger and be passive
I’m pleading crazy, pleading crazy, pleading crazy (pleading crazy)

Some day’s life stabs you in the back (pleading crazy)
Some day’s you want her at your side (pleading crazy)
Some days you can only be passive (pleading crazy)
Still pleading crazy (pleading crazy), pleading crazy (pleading crazy)
Pleading crazy to the masses

---

Umm-- yeah. As for a favorite? Probably Strewn Apart, Pieces of Thrice because to this day it even confuses me. I write most of these when I'm stoned, or burning out from beind stoned. So, even I'm surprised at what I can write intoxicated-- since my poetry when I'm not is total ****. Now, considering this is near ****worthy, itself, well-- we'll just say my normal poetry is even worse.
Pleading Crazy and Left All Alone with Wounds Full of Salt were songs for my band.

[PancaKe]

You have very dark work. Its so cool. I dont agree with half of the things ur sayin in ur poetry but I still reckon that u have an awesome way of wording things

[achooxp]

Mmm so this one was just an experimentation with word placement and punctuation, but here goes.

Papercut Memories

I do remember
And I now know
Many things you
Hoped I'd never know
Papercut memories
Hard to forget
And ever biting
But I'll do my best
to Love you,
Anyway.
Since you are.
And since I am.

[Leon-IH]

Even cats hate me ~ by me.. obviously.

Cats can't stand me
People want me dead
Do i bring them dread?

Cannot see, breath
No next world for me
If only you could see

Why am alone again
Humming dark rhyme
What is it this time?

Razors on my hands
Scars are my world
My fate is unfurled

Sit down and taunt
Ravens flock to you
What is there to do?

It's over for you, I
We cannot truly see
Must cats hate thee

[Tainted]

You have very dark work. Its so cool. I dont agree with half of the things ur sayin in ur poetry but I still reckon that u have an awesome way of wording things

Yeah. Half of my poetry is too controversial for TPM, so I left it to sit in the Word document.

I hate this poem. I don't like it at all. My friend Jessica commented on how my poetry was much better than hers, and because of this she refused to show me her work. So, I wanted to see her work-- and I asked her why I couldn't see it and she insisted "Because most of it is just 'Roses are red, violets are blue...' you know." So, I wrote this one in about two minutes while we continued talking on MSN and I showed her it and said "See-- we're the same. Now show me your stuff." She finally gave in.

For Jessica

Roses are red, violets are blue
Black runs the blood of veins cut anew
Saturated organs fall into a funnel
And white is the light at the end of the tunnel

The roses fall into nothingness, turning pale
The red’s attempt at tranquility fails
Red fades into pink as dim grows it’s life
At the end of the ages, there remains not but white

The blue becomes prominent, but it too falls down
From the tabletop, the vase shatters glass across ground
The violence causes silence, this blue is their last
Each violet petal severs into sections of glass

At the end of the day, nothing remains
The staged attempt lays voided, without gain
Roses, like shriveled white death, blood drawn away
And in sections of glass, tainted violets lay

Jessica did, however, give me a bit of an idea for a poem. When she was talking about it-- she said "Violets are red, roses are blue is a very powerful thing to start a poem off with." I disagreed, and then I noticed she had switched the violets with roses. So, I'm going to start a poem soon, don't know how it'll turn out, but it will feature the opening line, ala Jessica: "Violets are red, roses are blue"

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

[DannyBoy]

Don't be afraid to post things. You have a right to post it even if iit maybe controversial. It maybe but poetry and song writing is about getting out your feelings and its good to get that out there.


Here is a new one I just completed a few days ago when I was bored. Just kinda came to me and is now one of my top five favorites that I've done.


-Hell Shadow-


Living a so called average life,
I was once a loner on my own,
Thinkin of dreams and big hypes,
Always having a bitchy tone,
Learned to not care what they thought,
Living life without a doubt,
I know its time cuz i been thinkin alot,
This is gonna be the hardest thing for me,
Time to be what my destiny wants me to be.

Coming out of my hell shadow,
Can't control my fate,
Gotta keep breathing with the flow,
I should be at my destination at this rate,
Im ready and not saying no,
Hurry now and I can't be late,
I gotta get up and go,
From my hell shadow!

Remembering the times I had alone,
Wondering where these gifts will end up,
Now the black crow has flown,
Leaving its destiny behind in the small cup,
Its gotta find that strange place called home,
But lately haven't had very much luck,
Don't want to be the last one free and end up blown,


Coming out of my hell shadow,
Can't control my fate,
Gotta keep breathing with the flow,
I should be at my destination at this rate,
Im ready and not saying no,
Hurry now and I can't be late,
I gotta get up and go,
From my hell shadow!

Now sitting and reflecting,
Writing down everything I dream,
Times passing and melting,
Now its time to feel to be,
More than I ever thought possible,
Soon gonna be so full,
Can't be dull,
This is my time to fly!


Coming out of my hell shadow,
Can't control my fate,
Gotta keep breathing with the flow,
I should be at my destination at this rate,
Im ready and not saying no,
Hurry now and I can't be late,
I gotta get up and go,
From my hell shadow!
I gotta free,
Of this burning,
Gotta keep learning,
This is it,
This it yeah!
Coming out of my hell shadow,
Can't control my fate,
Gotta keep breathing with the flow,
I should be at my destination at this rate,
Im ready and not saying no,
Hurry now and I can't be late,
I gotta get up and go,
From my hell shadow!

[PancaKe]

I wrote this, when i was very angry as you can probably tell.. im fine now.. but i was so upset when iw rote this its kind of shocking..

__

Your opinions meant so much to me
They always meant so much to me
Why did it mean so much to me
Why did you mean so much to me

Your an insensative ba*tard
Your cold black hearted
How could I love you
How could I wonder

If you were all right
You were just fine
You disregarded me
I hate everything

Now its out in the open
What was once unspoken
three years down the drain
Never the same

Your lies are uncovered
The way that Ive suffered
You ba*tard its me
Its so hard to breathe

How could I wait for you
Who influenced me but you
In everything that I do
You ridiculed me
I'm never good enough for you

Wanting to be first always second place
You left me deflated you left me in disgrace
cant bear to see please don't show your face
Your so much better
and your always right
Now find some other ive had my day

[DannyBoy]

That is somthing I wouldn't see you writing Tara. All your other poems are much different but I like this one you did. I can sorta know how you feel with that one also.

Here is another one.



-The Risk-

Wanting something new,
Something that would always stay true,
Not something that would hurt me bad,
Something that would make me glad,
Was this all an illusion?
Messed up in the head with confusion,
All this mental abuse,
What was it that lite the fuse?

I'm not some tool,
You make look like a fool!

Can't be some little toy you bought,
Always wanting things a lot,
Getting into lots of fights,
Can't stop me I have a right,
Risk704-1934ing everything I own,
Talking all night on the phone,
If you can't handle this,
Then don't take the risk.

Partying it up every night,
Laying watching planes takes flight,
Prowling the dark streets,
Feeling the the rock of the bass beat,
Watching lives be ruined,
To bad i've already been through it,
All plans fell threw the gutter,
As everyone trys to talk but stutters!

You think that you rule,
But in the end your not very cool!

Can't be some little toy you bought,
Always wanting things a lot,
Getting into lots of fights,
Can't stop me I have a right,
Rising everything I own,
Talking all night on the phone,
If you can't handle this,
Then don't take the risk.

You think you know me but you don't,
Sorry that I dont front because I won't,
Sorry if you can't take my open mind,
You be an ass I promise im not going to be kind,
If you wanna party with me and have fun,
When things get heated don't run,
Welcome to everything im about.

Can't be some little toy you bought,
Always wanting things a lot,
Getting into lots of fights,
Can't stop me I have a right,
Rising everything I own,
Talking all night on the phone,
If you can't handle this,
Then don't take the risk.

[Tainted]

A Piercing I Wouldn’t Wear Around Anyone, Even Those Cool Kids Way Cooler Than Me At The Skatepark, Yeah, I Mean Those Guys That Only Come On Tuesdays
You just shot me in the ****ing heart
Shot me, you shot me again
Pierced my ventricles, poisoned dart
With a memo attached ‘Let’s be friends’

Not too loud, but break the silence
Contain the screams, lift the pick
Emotionless, condemned by violence
Thrust that thing right through my dick

Now alone, once again on my own
No more thinking of things before
Memories, carried in wind blown
I try to forget, but I want all the more

Edging me slightly, but still I bleed
So I reach my hand inside the chest
Fingers wrapped round what kills me
Rip out the heart and fade into nothingness

Don't like it, myself.

Waste
Body flung, emotions stay
Among the trash the body lay
Emotions without body to feign
Struggle as they hide the pain

Short but sweet? You decide.

Mix-Matched Organs
Violets are red, roses are blue
Open your eyes, see them lie to you
The sky is green, the grass is blue
Open your eyes, don’t let them lie to you

You’ve got a heart in your head
And a brain in your chest
The brain pumps all the plasma
And the heart knows best

This is that one Jessica inspired me to do. I noticed it was going nowhere so I left it hanging.

Aliens
I don't know, where the **** it is
Do you think it was the aliens?
They sailed down from their ship above
Stole my marker, and stole my love

They took her far, far away
To a planet long blown astray
And they gave her wine, and they gave her cheese
Then the alien got on his hands and knees

"Hello, Jenny" was what he said
"I don't know you, but I won't forget”
"The way you looked at me with glee”
"So, I ask you human, will you marry me?"

Except it didn't really sound like that
It was in some crazy alien tongue with blats
So Jenny looked up into his eyes
She carried herself well, to her own surprise

"Alien" she said "I don't know you
"But you're better than the little 2 inch fuse”
"On my boyfriend back in Earth so small”
"He's got the dynamite-- but who likes balls?

"Aliiiien" she said
"I love you, but I just can't"
"I got friends on earth, I can't leave them there"
"I got things to do, I got to wash my hair"

So, the alien looked deep into her eyes
He set his ray gun to vaporize
He pointed it, said, “Prepare to die”
And blew that bitch into the ****ing sky

This was a joke one, obviously. I was having a conversation with this one girl who's a bit weird, like myself, on MSN, and she said "I lost my sock... do you think it was the aliens?" And, well, I started typing this one out into the chatbox thinger, and in a couple seconds this poem was born. We got a good laugh out of it.

Death is a Teenager, She's into the Goth Fad
Death she whispers so soothing
A lullaby, it soundly puts me to sleep
Her words they appear so moving
At her final breaths, fresh widows do weep

When she’s done with her song, she packs up
She leaves and takes the train at noon
Dead men are left behind, mentally ****ed
But don’t worry guys, she’ll be back real soon

She’s that desecrating whore,
She feeds on so much more
She eats all your insides
And then leaves you out to die

The waiter on the train asks her for an order
She says she’ll like a martini—she likes them dry
Eyes now looking down, she opens up her death-count folder
But still notices the path of the waiter’s eyes

She swishes it around once, not twice
It’s got a little olive, speared with a sword in it
The rims of the glass are frosted with thin ice
When the waiter comes back, she kindly throws a fit

“That Martini wasn’t dry!” she screams clear
”In fact, if I do recall correctly, it was rather wet, as hell”
“But ma’am, it was dry,” he replied full of fear
Her finger touching him gently, and to the floor he fell

She’s that desecrating whore,
She feeds on so much more
She eats all your insides
And then leaves you out to die

She wears black lipstick, but listens to no one
And Jesus told me she used to suck cocks for money
But if she wrapped her lips around your gun
You’d no longer be finding your waste of five bucks funny

She likes to kill, she feeds on the ill
She desecrates, and men she rapes
She hates child porn, but likes to mourn
But to my nights, she’ll be the black in the light

Another joke one.

And I came in with a boo, but now I must bid a fine...

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

EDIT: Added a whole bunch more.

[PancaKe]

Tainted damn ur stuff is so dark. Its quite cool though, u have a totally mad way with ur words that I want to be able to have.

This one is kind of unfinished, I'm not sure where to keep going with it...

Her Job

They all watch as she goes by
They tel her how she looks
She begins to cry
...
She can't take it no more
They dont know what they did wrong
Shes heard it all before
Shes wondering what shes done

To be a pretty girl
Every head she turns
Thats the pretty girls job
But what does she earn?

[Tainted]

Tainted damn ur stuff is so dark. Its quite cool though, u have a totally mad way with ur words that I want to be able to have.

Thanks, it's really nice to gain some praise for my writing, especially from a veteran such as yourself. Does anyone here gather inspiration from anything that's a little odd? Like, for example, I like spiders, they intrigue me-- don't know why. For some odd reason, whenever I see a spider dangling, or scampering on my wall, I feel like writing. Interesting things, really.

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

[PancaKe]

Thanks, it's really nice to gain some praise for my writing, especially from a veteran such as yourself.

Lol. Me a veteran? (I always thought the word was vetenarian lol) As if. But sigh, if you insist I'm getting older...

Um.. I get inspiration from like, emotions and things that are on my mind. If God is on my mind, he's my inspiration, if a situation is on my mind, thats what i write about, but I write with my feelings "intwined in my words" so to speek.

[Leon-IH]

I'm dreaming again
Stuck with my life
Watching people go
From under the snow

I'm not disturbed
Just dissapointed
Watch the world go
So sad and so slow

It's a burning globe
Trying to break out
Watching people go
From under the snow

Your all out chanting
Die Planet Die Planet
Watch the world go
So sad and so slow

It's so disturbing now
I can't see anymore
Watching people go
From under the snow

So this is the end now
What is death like now
It's all over, just give up now.

[Tainted]

Alright, just wrote a couple.

Little Hopping Bunny with a Big Hat and Dentures
If I were a little hopping bunny, I once thought
I’d sleep on a mattress instead of a cot
I’d like to listen to classical, I’d have my tea at noon
I’d stay up late at nights outside and quietly watch the moon

Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh, what a mother fùcking paradise
Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise

If I were a little hopping bunny, I once thought
I would live my life eating grass a lot
Occasionally I think I’d have a cabbage or two
But in the end I’d really have not to eat but few

Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise
Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise

So come with me, come with me
Come get away from it all
So come with me, fùcking come with me
Be a bunny and bound the walls

Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise
Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise

Save me, come along, hate your reality
Hate it, ****ing hate the life you’re in
And just when you’re broken down, weeping
There’ll be only one place you can dig

Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise
Oh, what a fùcking paradise it’d be
Oh what a mother fùcking paradise
---

If the filter evading is a trouble, **** it. I think people know what the word is when they see "****" anyway.
This poem means a shitload to me, because there's a certain madness to it-- and this madness is withheld behind a bunny, the smallest and most harmless of all creatures... Heh... I don't know why it means a lot to me, a lot of it doesn't even rhyme-- it just says something to me.

Butterflies
Butterflies, one fùcking wing
Spins in a circle, still watching
Life is a whore, a homeless wife
She works this hell of a thing we call life

You stand there, and you scream
Insecure—they’ll listen one day it seems
But no, never, your voice only dies
Inaudible, but still to yourself you lie

They’ll never hear you, nobody will
Even as your shrieks reach peaks and define shrill
Although you try to redeem, you still fade away
And where once a voiceless stood, now a body lay
---

I like this one too. Not much else to say.

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

[PancaKe]

Coem on dude, we all know what "****" means but dont filter evade. You know the rules. Don't make me warn you, I'm too tired. This aint a warning, its a notification that if you filter evade again I'll have to give you a warning just to folow the rules. And anyway, if we all know what **** means then theres 'no reason to filter evade cuz we'll all understand anyway.

And besides, I dont particularily want to read that world, even with an apostrophy over one of the letters.
___________________

Both of them

Your being selfish
Who am I to talk
Youve become jealous
Of yourself
Oh this is always what I've wanted
Two in one
Oh this is always what I've dreamed of
The two compiled into one

You represent
Both of them
and I dont want to view this person
ever again
You represent
Both of them
and two alone is bad enough
dont make it two in one

[Leon-IH]

Tainted, great poetry - but you evasion of the word filter just makes you look like an idiot.

Blinded
I don't want to know
Don't try to find why
Watching the snow
Someday we will die

Alone in a cold world
Will it be our time yet
Banners now unfurled
We must all pay debt

But why is the snow
Covering logic's hand
Hiding down too low
Fearing whats grand

Sitting in my square
Seen it before you
Your falling beware
The end for me too.

[Bulbasaur4]

Tainted- your work is morbid and perhaps better words could be subsituted for the 'bad' word, but they are very deep and morbid. Me likes.

Leon- Yours is nice as well, I like the title and the energy coming from it.


;_; no comments on mine... oh well...

If tears were my soul,
If feeling was my happiness,
If sight found my role,
If speech would find my tainted bliss,

My tears would be blood,
Myself numb to the outside,
Seeing nothing but black mud,
Saying nothing but have cried,


Untamed spirit I once was
Broken by unknown lies
Wandering life with no cause
Bleeding wings do not fly

Trapped in a prison
The bars made of nullity
Doomed victim of vision
To be lost in nothing

[Leon-IH]

B4 - Good but odd, was that actually meant to rhyme or not?

Sunlight
Burning my eyes away
Taking what i've seen
Don't let it come here
The fields are all green

Lost all alone out here
Walking through a day
Wishing I was at home
Having found my way

Can't I care anymore
Our time is never yet
Weathered memories
Why can't we forget

Too horrific to lose it
Things we saw today
Why must it be you
Who got to fly away

[Tainted]

Tainted- your work is morbid and perhaps better words could be subsituted for the 'bad' word, but they are very deep and morbid. Me likes.

Thanks, your poem is quite the work itself, I don't really know how to describe it. To me, it's very powerful, and gets it's point out easily... but then again, I've never been all that good at deciphering poems for a common audience. The way I see it-- everyone interprets a poem differantly, and very seldom is it exactly similar. I've got one on the way, myself, so stay tuned.

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

[PancaKe]

Nice work B4 ^.^ Me likes your poem very much..

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Our wings were spread apart
Have been ripped apart
The wind that once made us fly
Left beneath our hearts

Im calling out from here
Will my voice reach you from here
The tears choke up my throat
Its getting dark I fear

The Lord brought me to this
He will bring me through all this
How long will I wait
To be carried to my bliss

The meadows that were once green are no longer
The sun that shines on them has burnt them yonder
The daffodills and daisys that sprung up in May
Are no longer standing
This purity was tainted as far as I remember

Ive been waiting for your answer
Haunting for your answer
I wish I wish I wish
That the questions I never asked you

These tears are deep inside
Tears well deep inside
The hours that I've regretted
And these tears I've never cried

Im too chicken to call or speak
I cant look at you and speak
Because you wont look at me
And how could I ever think

The meadows that were once green are no longer
The sun that shines on them has burnt them yonder
The daffodills and daisys that spring up in September
Are no longer standing
This purity was tainted as far as I remember

[Leon-IH]

Wow pancake, that poem is very emotive but without falling into a trap of non-stop emotional language - I guess thats why nobody has replied to this yet, a hard act to follow

Forest of Soul
Why must we be alone
Walking under the sun
Looking into the wood
Life and death are one

Why must we see one
As our souls reflection
Walking into the cone
To find our connection

Another sleeping soul
Sliding down a tunnel
See the chilling silence
Like water in a funnel

Now we cannot walk
We cannot hide away
Why must you and I
Not last another day

NOTE: I posted this on Serebii, but it's time to get this thread back onto the front page - also I've never posted a poem there before so feedback might not be so great.

[Tainted]

Toast
There’s a little black sunshine in everyone
But there’s a little more in me
And even when the song is no longer sung
There’s toast sitting up in a tree

Toast isn’t for you, toast is for me
Toast doesn’t like to be buttered much
Toast grows from the high apple tree
And toast would much rather be touched

Apart
The entire world collapses as you fall into the end
Implosion causes lapses, without much time to mend
They scream and they shout, they kick and they cry
But they don’t know about how my voice inside does die

You don’t know just what to do
When the spear it passes you through
Pierces skin, it pierces the heart
And leaves you left fallen apart

[Pig on the Wing]

The Spiders' Web

It glistens in the sunlight,
And sparkles with the dew,
Little fly little fly,
This trap is waiting for you.

Fly towards it, coming ever closer,
You become stuck as you hit it,
Little fly little fly,
I'll eat you bit by bit.

Here I come,
Ready or not,
I'm hungry for a meal,
And you're best eaten than left out to rot.

Now I scurry away,
Back to my hiding place,
My hiding place in the corner near the tree,
Will I eat you or let you go? We'll see, we'll see.

[PancaKe]

I liked it Snorlax. Was very cool. Especially the ending, was really cool. I dont know why i just like the idea of things hiding in poems. *shrugs*

--

Look here I stand
Torn between two
Paths lie ahead
What shall I do
Which would you pick
Which would you choose
The one who you love
Or the one who loves you

If you ask me this
If you want the truth
Give me time
To get back to you...

How can I go
When I dont know where
They want me now
Life is not fair
How did you pick
How did you know
The right path to walk
The right one to follow

If you ask me this
If you want the truth
Give me time
To get back to you...

[Tainted]

C.A.R.E.
How many times does that love song play
On the radio, in one melancholy-soaked day
I like to dream about us, I like to dream at night
I like to dream about a life without the light

That slow depression seeps over like a fine champagne
Textured ever so carefully, it reminds me of where I lain
Last night when you whispered ever so softly into my ear
You didn’t need to tell me twice about how we drunk too much beer

Remember the night, last night, party—everyone got ****ed
And Merf was upstairs in the bathroom getting sucked
But you and I sat downstairs among those passed out
We held each other on the couch and knew without a doubt

That this was special, that this was it
But it was like a lighter that couldn’t be lit
As we fell asleep, and I dreamed of the dawn
I eventually awoke to find you were gone

So I searched the yards, I searched the park
I walked up to 7/11 in the dark
To find you’re not here, and I’m not there
Maybe you just never really cared

It's about a party I went to last night. Best ****ing party ever, I'm just left with your usual almost lethargic feeling today. It's horrible, really.

Adieu,
Zak Hunter

[PancaKe]

November

Day by day
You help me along my way
Hour after hour
time flys by
and still i wonder why
you stopped to help me
in my life

How can i repay the favor
You are going away
How can I tell you waht you mean to me
When I dont have the words to say

let me hold you tight once more
May you be helped by God above
Let me say before your through that door
There was nobody else that I have ever loved
With the amounts that I loved you
On the other side you'll make it through

[ryandude713]

This is a poem i wrote during a very complicated time of my life
it represents man's inner struggle to find himself in such a strange world.

Abstract Like a Stick Figure

Fun on a bun
When you're stuck in the sun
And you're shunned by a nun
Just know it's been done

You can't rhyme like that
Your lyrics are crap
You look like a rat
I'm a hungry cat

So that's the flow
Is there symbolism? NO!
That's all you need to know
And now you have to go

[PancaKe]

Lol. I quite like that poem. It makes me feel happy inside for some reason. I know that probably wasnt what you were trying to achieve, but its the effect it has had. *shrugs* i guess just your choice of words for expressing that were a bit abstract, and im a very abstract person.

either way i really liked that.

[Leon-IH]

Chips on the Dance
Welcome to my hell
It's the end of town
Watch the fire start
The chips are down

Bloods on the floor
But no cuts to see
Hammers are falling
For you and for me

Burning men hiding
Nothing is still alive
But for no reasons
Live your last jive

For what we make
We must all prance
Just die here today
For one last dance


The Future As It Is
Communication down
Sitting under the sun
Looking into the blaze
That makes all as one

Walking into the dark
Smiling into the night
Two times cut short
Falling from my flight

Falling into a cavern
Full of burning cold
Watching the world
Living to be too old

Cut away your joys
Throw your dreams
Give away happiness
Becoming machines


Rivers of Choice
You must fall down
Or I shall push you
Drop to the ground
On a count of two

The end of a spree
The end of this joy
Come back with us
Enjoy this here toy

Fall from a tall tree
The branch quivers
As I can't ever see
Life as deep rivers

Falling into gullies
Living in deep gaps
Weeds falling away
Into deeper traps


Career Solace
I am your solace
Nightmares again
Followed to here
As a falling raven

Death is evaded
While we shared
A simplicity here
To feel declared

Simple insanity
Cannot cause it
Cutting threads
Bit by frayed bit

Cutting life out
Puts death away
Sitting in a box
Slaving for pay

Give it up here
Show the door
Use it yourself
Away from war