Yu-Gi-Oh: Sister of Anansi

[Dark Sage]

By the way .hack, something you should also do before you edit; this is being picky, but the Monster Diane used is called "Gearfried the Iron Knight", not "Gear Fried". One word, not two.

Another thing I worry about is your inconsistency with Fusion Monsters. In some of your chapters, they have to wait a turn before attacking, while in others (most), they can attack immediately. I suggest you settle on one system for Fusions and stick with it, because it is getting confusing.

- Venusaur

[mr_pikachu]

*gasp* *pant* *wheeze*

After days of reading combined with intermittent loss of the internet (grrr...), I've finally caught up! I tell you, month-long vacations can really make you miss a lot.

Well, these last two chapters (which were the ones I just now read) were... um, interesting? It's kinda odd that a young kid would be a cross-dresser, but I suppose I can almost see it. I just think that usually people don't realize that sort of thing about themselves until they're older. (I have heard some sad exceptions, however, which usually involve cruel bullying and abuse. It's a pity.) And Norus... whoa. That was way, way worse than I thought he'd turn out. What a dastardly character. Let's just hope his antics don't start up again when the finals begin, or else there'll be a lot of trouble at Duelist Camp.

Your duels have been pretty good for the last several chapters. You've used quite a few novel decks and shown great strategies on both sides of the game. I am pleased that the girls set aside their legendary dragons for now, though. That was beginning to be very cheap. It will be interesting to see how they handle the toughest players at the camp in the finals without them, though. And we know that at least two of them will fall by the conclusion. I can't wait for the dramatic clashes between friends! (I'm assuming you'll show them, because that would make for great tension. It seems too obvious for you to decide to do otherwise. Of course, I could be wrong and be surprised by something even better, as I have been in the past. We'll see.) These next several chapters should be superb.

One thing I've noticed, though, is the slacking you've been doing in your editing lately. I've seen all sorts of little errors in your past few chapters: typos, punctuation errors, possession mistakes, switched names, missed italics tags, incorrect life point and monster scores, and others besides those. This is a great fic, .hack. Don't let it get cluttered with errors that I know you're good enough to see. If you just edit each chapter a few more times, I'm confident that you'll be surprised at how many things you correct. Relax, take your time, and be sure to polish this fic. You've worked so hard on it; why let it be tarnished even in the slightest now?

But overall, as I've said, this is a great fic. I'm impressed with the ingenuity of your characters and plotlines, and I look forward to seeing what twists you have in store for us yet. It should be exciting to find out what you have left up your sleeve. So, I'll see you then!

[Shuppet Master]

Well, these last two chapters (which were the ones I just now read) were... um, interesting? It's kinda odd that a young kid would be a cross-dresser, but I suppose I can almost see it. I just think that usually people don't realize that sort of thing about themselves until they're older. (I have heard some sad exceptions, however, which usually involve cruel bullying and abuse. It's a pity.)

Talk to Opaltiger about that guy,it was his idea for a character. I only reduced his age so he could fit into one of the younger cabins,because I already had had a couple of boys for the Marauding Captain and Penguin Knight cabins and I didn't want John to associate with them.

And Norus... whoa. That was way, way worse than I thought he'd turn out. What a dastardly character. Let's just hope his antics don't start up again when the finals begin, or else there'll be a lot of trouble at Duelist Camp.

Don't worry. The last act of villiany he pulls will be in the finals,and it will be against a girl,but I swear,nothing perverted happens. After that 'talk' from his counselor and subsequent lectures,his only revenge against Diane will be to humiliate her by kicking her out of the tournament in a rematch(which will never happen,as you'll soon see).

Your duels have been pretty good for the last several chapters. You've used quite a few novel decks and shown great strategies on both sides of the game. I am pleased that the girls set aside their legendary dragons for now, though. That was beginning to be very cheap.

I did that because Timaeus,Critias,and Hermos were called forth in the anime only when Yugi,Joey,or Kaiba was forced to duel under the Seal,and I felt a little guilty for writing the girls in a corner where I had no choice but to call upon the dragons. However,they will show up again during a very critial time after the tournament,when their duels have much higher stakes. The next time the Dragons will show up again will be at the exhibition duel with Machus.

It will be interesting to see how they handle the toughest players at the camp in the finals without them, though. And we know that at least two of them will fall by the conclusion.

Of course! With all three girls in,one of them will have to overpower the others. It's fate.

I can't wait for the dramatic clashes between friends! (I'm assuming you'll show them, because that would make for great tension. It seems too obvious for you to decide to do otherwise. Of course, I could be wrong and be surprised by something even better, as I have been in the past. We'll see.) These next several chapters should be superb.

Not to worry,Mr. Pikachu! I promise that the duels will be epic battles. And yes,there will be better duels in the future,starting with the duel vs. Machus.

One thing I've noticed, though, is the slacking you've been doing in your editing lately. I've seen all sorts of little errors in your past few chapters: typos, punctuation errors...

I sincerely apologize. I know I've made a few mistakes about monster scores because I didn't check the right sources. Also,I'll run each chapter through a spellchecker and get all those typos edited out.

But overall, as I've said, this is a great fic.

Thank you! I promise not to disappoint.

[opaltiger]

Talk to Opaltiger about that guy,it was his idea for a character. I only reduced his age so he could fit into one of the younger cabins,because I already had had a couple of boys for the Marauding Captain and Penguin Knight cabins and I didn't want John to associate with them.

He was originally 16, I swear! *shifty eyes*

[Shuppet Master]

I apologize for changing the age,Opaltiger,but you said "random" for the cabin,and there weren't many of the younger duelists dueling the girls.

To everyone else: I've finished the next chapter. I apologize for any mistakes,I try to edit the text so it doesn't look like crap,but I have to leave for classes soon,so I put this up quickly. Don't bug me about formatting mistakes until later,when I get back this afternoon and edit it. THEN you can whine.

[opaltiger]

Ooh, secret double agent. XD And no Hermos or Critias? Nice twist. Can't wait to see Circe duel, I have a feeling it'll be good. Anyway, hope you update soon!

[Dark Sage]

Very interesting...

Who is Pisaro's new spy? This can't be good for Gwen!

I loved the e-mails Diane recieved from Sheena and the other two Eliminators (one of which you made up yourself). The Gatekeeper's explanation of his past was well done.

The next chapter should be quite interesting...

- Brian

P.S. You made an error in The Gatekeeper's story. The Grecian Sphinx figures in the myth of Oedipus, not Bellephron.

[Shuppet Master]

I apologize for that. It's been a while since I read the myth,but you are right.

As for the new spy,I'll say this much,he was a reader contribution by Shadow Djinn,but sadly,I had closed the whole reader contribution thing because there was no further need for dueling campers. I didn't want to forbid his idea,so I checked it and got an idea of my own which led to the character becoming Pisaro's double agent. I won't spoil any more,but Shadow Djinn,expect your character to appear next chapter and his fate will be decided as I see fit(it won't be a bad one,though).

As for the e-mails, I wanted to expand a bit on Venusaur's setting. As Siegfried says in my story,he was planning on hiring ten Eliminators total. The "Black Adder" character was just something that popped into my head - I was writing up an idea for a reptile duelist and when I named it "Black Adder",the idea of a Jack Sparrow pirate character came to mind,considering that Black Adder sounds like a rogueish name. You might see her if I decide to plan out a future Duelatopia tournament story concerning D.G.B.

(PS: I might edit the part in the e-mail about the sharks to harmless sharks. I heard there were some species of sharks that don't attack humans on sight. Dolphins...well, considering that they make beeping noises when they cry,that might ruin the mood.)

[mr_pikachu]

So the finalists have been decided, huh? I guess we can only wait to see who will face off in the quarterfinals. The loss of Hermos and Critias isn't a biggie, though, because Bethany and Diane weren't going to use them anyway. I guess this'll make them hold back the dragons for certain.

Good job with the introduction of our mystery spy... who could this kid be? And nice idea in showing Machus's thoughts. It really gives us some perspective on what's coming, though not enough to give everything away. I liked the part about Jake's celebration, too. And Twilight said that Slifer was close... why do I have a feeling I know exactly where that Egyptian God card is? Hmm... this should be very intriguing.

I do feel, however, that you went overboard with a few characters' dialogue. Lina especially seemed semi-drunk, especially since I have a picture in my head of her laughing insanely thinking of the kids kissing and of her own... past experiences. It just seemed kinda off.

But otherwise, this was nice. Although it was fillery, you did a good job making it exciting enough to enjoy. There are a lot of things going on in the shadows, and our heroes are about to meet them all head-on... Anyway, I'll see you next chapter!


P.S. I sent you a PM before I saw this chapter or your replies following it. You can disregard it if you wish. Sorry about the inconvenience, and for being too late.

[Shuppet Master]

Next chapter is now, Mr. Pikachu. I've just finished it. Not only that, I've finished the chapter after that one too! (I wrote out the duel in a class and put it on Notepad when I got home, spending all night to type it up! :roftl: )

Anyways, here's the first chapter. The second chapter will be given in a couple of hours, just to add some suspense. Enjoy!

[Dark Sage]

Well this wasn't too bad, a bit of a filler.

This Ares guy... He's no doubt that spy working for Pisaro. He's obviously going to break Gwen's heart into tiny pieces when the truth is revealed. One of the most callous tricks in the book.

I've got to see more. Write more!

- Venusaur

[Shadow Djinn]

Wow, my character's an ass XD. I never expected Ares to be a spy or get Gwen to like him o_O;. Gwen's gonna be really sad when Ares reveals himself. Whee, I love my evil character. ^^

EDIT: Um, one question. Why is Ares' looks all different? o_O;

[Shuppet Master]

I seriously apologize,Shadow Djinn. I didn't read your description good enough. PM me the description again and I'll fix it.

Okay,here's the next chapter,the first 1/4-final duel! It's PG for some euphinisms in the first scene,and there's bad karma and a gross description at the end,so if you are offended easily,avert your eyes! Enjoy!

[Dark Sage]

So many things to mention.

Ares is starting to become interesting. I think he truly loves Gwen. Even though he asked Pisaro to make her into his love slave, I have a feeling he may double-cross the villains before this is over...

What the heck happened to Twilight's Necklass?! A Millennium Item isn't something you misplace! Methinks she lost is on purpose for some reason. Hmmm...

The fight between Diane and Beth was classic. You had me worried for a minute, but thank goodness they came to their senses.

The duel? I think it was one of the best you've writen in awhile. The details were excellent.

A few notes on Twilight's comments. I liked when she became scared after Donnie used the card that forced Yami to use the Seal (truth be told, I shivered a bit when I read that part). Of course, how was Donnie to know about that?

However, there was one teeny-tiny mistake. Twilight said that both Yugis used De-Fusion. Um, no. Yugi Sr. used that card often, but Yugi Jr. never did, and I don't intend for him to ever use it.

But anyho, a great chapter, and I await the next.

- Venusaur

[The Blue Avenger]

What the heck happened to Twilight's Necklass?! A Millennium Item isn't something you misplace! Methinks she lost is on purpose for some reason. Hmmm...

I'm thinking she didn't like the visions and took it off.

Anyway, I really liked the past few chapters. Nice detail, good duels overall, and Ares is shaping up to be a devious character. Urg, but it was kinda graphic at the end of the recent chapter.

Laterz.

[mr_pikachu]

Well, that was a good duel by both parties. Brilliant clinching move by Jake; I didn't see the Trap coming, either! Of course, that's probably because I forgot that he had two face down cards on the field... Nice portrayal of the characters, though I think the catfight may have been a teeny bit too much. Then again, I don't profess to know even close to everything about the behavior of women. The chapter prior to that wasn't bad either, although it was only a filler. I'll get to my thoughts on that one momentarily.

The settings were done pretty well in this last chapter. Great work with the transitions, and good job in making the point of the audience's reactions. That made everything a lot clearer and far more interesting. The relationships between the characters were shown pretty well, too. Good development of Twilight's character, too; perhaps she detests that Necklace even more than she thinks...

In the chapter before that, you did a good job of adding content to make the filler worthwhile. (No, not that kind of content!) There were the expected tournament announcements, the courting of the girls, a little refresher on a few of the eliminated duelists, and of course the thickening plot ot Gwen and her false romancer.

There were things in those chapters, though, that I believe could have been better. I, for one, am of the opinion that some of Norus' thoughts are a bit too much. (Before you assume you know what I mean, please read my explanation.) Most villains similar to Norus, in both real life and literature, do not think themselves to be evil. They find justification for their actions, no matter how irrational. So thoughts like "At the least, I can get a sick satisfaction of seeing Bethany turn against her former friend!" go a bit too far. I doubt he'd consider the satisfaction "sick"; he might instead refer to it as sweet justice or, perhaps, revenge. But "sick" indicates that he is in the wrong, and I doubt the little creep would ever admit to that. Make sure you don't overdo your characters' traits, or else you risk making them seem unrealistic.

The same sort of thing took place in the chapter before that with Gwen (and was mentioned... thoroughly... in the most recent update). I won't go into the details of what you said, but again, her actions seem kind of out of character. I understand that some people do participate in... uh... "acts" at very young ages. But Gwen never appeared to be the type of girl who would need that type of thing at age 13. (That is her age, right?) Those people who do things like that at that point in their lives are usually very, very tormented by something. Since nothing even approaching that degree of angst has been mentioned regarding Gwen, it just doesn't seem to fit her character. Plus, even if she was suffering, her life would have improved drastically with her two new friends by her side. ...Okay, and watching from the bushes, but let's not get into that. Just make sure you don't over-exaggerate your characters.

Overall, though, you're doing fine. The filler was good enough to keep our attention, and the duel was stellar. It'll be interesting to see if you can top that in the future. I look forward to your efforts in that matter. Anyway, see you next chapter!


P.S.

What the heck happened to Twilight's Necklass?! A Millennium Item isn't something you misplace! Methinks she lost is on purpose for some reason. Hmmm...

Perhaps it has something to do with this:

"We will," said Twilight, rubbing the Necklace. An idea formed. For tonight at least, I wish to be free of this nightmares... maybe someone else can bear their burden. As much as it scares me, I want to be free for one night.

[Shuppet Master]

Venusaur: I seriously apologize,I just realized that I GOOFED! I forgot to add in the scenes with the Necklace in them. I'll edit Chapter 24 ASAP with the proper scenes.

And Yugi Jr. never used De-Fusion? My bad.

BlueAvenger: Well,when Venusaur created his Duel Disks and had direct attacks show physical damage to the duelists,I did the same thing for the new Duel Disks. It's not my fault that explosions do such...damage. I know,I once saw a war veteran who looked like Hell because he had stepped on a landmine,and the scars didn't go away. Trust me,explosions do a LOT of damage. (If you want,I'll edit that part a little to make it less graphic.)

Mr. Pikachu: You have a point. I guess I got so swept up by my characters' moods that I forgot about the realism. Norus and Gwen are both young teens of about thirteen and I doubt that they'd ever think about things like that. Here I am,bashing some author for writing a raunchy Ash/Misty lemon set just after the very third episode of the first season,and I'm having my character - which are only a year older - thinking about things like rape and passionate love-making. It would have worked better had I aged them all by three years.

Looks like I have a LOT of rewriting to do,especially the Arnold/Diane duel.

EDIT: To everyone,I've come up with a decision. Instead of picking through every piece of the thread and implanted revised chapters,I'm going to do two things. I'll still keep plugging new chapters here,but for my revised chapters...

(1) I'm going to put a website that houses all my chapters in TXT/HTML format,so I can work better with it. (I'd put it on Fanfiction.net because the Edit Chapter function is so much easier,but Venusaur warned me not to do so until Mandate was completely put up on there.) I'll PM the link to anyone who is interested,but not until the site is well-entrenched. (I'm grabbing clip art and other goodies for the site right now and I have a server on Yahoo!)

(2) I'll start a new thread for the revised chapters and,when I get all the revised chapters up on that thread,I'll shut this thread down and you can post your comments on the new thread.

[Dark Sage]

Venusaur: I seriously apologize,I just realized that I GOOFED! I forgot to add in the scenes with the Necklace in them. I'll edit Chapter 24 ASAP with the proper scenes.

Your forgiven about the goof. Just add the new scene ASAP, and let us know when it's been added.

- Venusaur

[Shuppet Master]

IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT

I just wanted to get this off my chest, before you readers start to ask questions and clear anything up about this fanfic.

I will continue to add chapters to this fanfic when I can. However,I am also working on fixing the fanfic itself. I have gotten a lot of complaints,and discovered a lot of errors in plot and the duels,so I plan to put up a new thread with a new version of this story once it's well-revised.

Once I get the chapters I've put up so far revised,I plan on shutting this thread down so I don't have two threads on the same story. I'll warn you people before-hand.

However,because of this,I don't plan on putting up many more new chapters right now. Maybe just finish up the finals and leave you all at a cliffy. Mwa ha ha... :badsmile:

Regardless,Venusaur is helping me beta-read the chapters,which I am uploading to a secret fanfiction site I've been working on. As each chapter is edited and polished,I'll convert it to a format that can be posted up on this board, and then I'll post the chapters once at day,at average,so that that revision catches up quickly to this thread.

In the meantime,be patient. The next chapter,the rematch between Diane and Shanna,will be up on this thread this coming week,as well as the third duel,between Norus and Sonja.

[Dark Sage]

Let me just say that this will in no way effect my own fanfic. It will continue as planned.

I already read .hack's revised prologue, and it is a good deal better than what he already had.

- Venusaur

[opaltiger]

*dies*

*types random sites in attempt to find hidden fanfic site*

Yes. I'm wierd. Yaysies, Jake won. Umm. I'm wierder than I thought. I think I'll just go now.

I hope you'll still write a few mroe chapters. Must read finals. XD

[Shuppet Master]

Forget it, the chances of finding my website before it's finished are worse than findnig a shiny Skitty with all 31 IVs.

Don't worry. I intend to keep putting up new chapters. In fact, I've just finished the next duel of the finals. It's a rematch between Shanna and Diane. Enjoy.

Oh, and opaltiger, weird is the one expection to the 'i before e' rule.

[Dark Sage]

Uh hack, your text seemed to have been cut off before the end.

Fix it, and then I'll comment.

- Venusaur

[Shadow Djinn]

Um..the ending is screwed up, it's just 2 lines of characters. I can't really comment on it but from I read it's very interesting. Just one remark, Fear From the Dark can only be special summoned when your opponent activates a card that sends it directly to the graveyard.

[Shuppet Master]

I apologize. I don't know HOW the last part disappeared and got replaced by gibberish. Anyway,it's fixed now.

And is that the true effect of Fear, Shadow Djinn? If so,I completely screwed up all the chapters I used him in! I wanted to have Diane have a monster that she could bring to the field whenever she discarded it.

[Dark Sage]

Okay I liked it. Empress Elf and Daughter of Red Eyes are killer Monsters.

But one thing... Doesn't using Soul Exchange count as a normal summon? If so, Shanna made two normal summons in one turn, the Red Eyes and the Spear Dragon.

But aside from that little midtake, it was a good chapter. I can't wait for the next.

And don't worry about Fear From The Dark's real effect. Just claim artistic license.

- Venusaur

[Shuppet Master]

Okay,I will. And I'll claim a bit of license for Soul Exchange,because it's been a long time since I've examined that card's effect. If I recall,Kaiba uses it three times and sacrifices three opposing monsters for Obelisk.

I've always thought about Dark Elf and Mystical Elf - they look so much alike and their stats are simply inverses of each other. (2000/800) (800/2000) M-Warior #1 and M-Warrior #2 fuse into Karbolana Warrior and Roboyarou and Robolady fuse into Super Roboyarou/lady. I thought it would be nice to have something like that for the two Elves. In fact,I've been thinking about it before I started this fic.

And the next chapter will be good,I promise.

[opaltiger]

I was half expecting Diane to lose. Ah well, 'twould've been a nice plot twist. As forthe next duel, I vote Sonja. =D

[starjake]

Yes, I have been reading the whole time, and yes, I like what I see! You're doing a great job with the characters *coughgoJakecough* and you know when to thicken the plot; kudos to you!

That being said, there was a technicality in the Jake vs. Donald duel. Flame Dancer has 550 ATK and 450 DEF. Molten Destruction would have given him stats of 1050 / 50. Salamandra would give him stats of 1750 / 50, and so on. Since he did deal Battle Damage a few times, it does affect the math a little bit. Not that it really matters, and you can always claim poetic liscense and whatnot.

Other than that, I can't wait to see the next duel; it should prove to be rather interesting!

[Shuppet Master]

Okay,thanks for the stats,I really needed that. I promise to fix that in the revision. Oh,and be sure not to miss it when I put up the first semi-final duel between Jake and his opponent. Who is it? I ain't telling!

EDIT: Next chapter is up, between Sonja and Norus. Enjoy. :badsmile:

[Dark Sage]

Well, my character was beaten... oh well...

I could have sworn Exodia Necross was immune to Monster Effects too, but I might be wrong...

I'm truly beginning to go from "hate" to "despise" as far as Norus is concerned. I hope that whoever wins the next duel kicks his tail all the way to Timbuktu.

Gwen versus Beth next... I can't imagine what will happen...

Well, maybe I can, but my lips are sealed...

[starjake]

Wow. I'm gonna hafta agree with Venusaur on the Norus-bashing. He's as evil as the fiends in his deck!

As for Exodia Necross...

Exodia Necross
DCR - 020: Ultra Rare
Dark/Spellcaster/4 stars/ATK 1800/DEF 0
This card can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "Contract with Exodia". This card is not destroyed as a result of battle at any time or by the effects of Spell or Trap Cards. During each of your Standby Phases, increase the ATK of this card by 500 points. This card is destroyed when you do not have all 5 of these cards in your Graveyard: "Exodia the Forbidden One", "Right Arm of the Forbidden One", "Left Arm of the Forbidden One", "Right Leg of the Forbidden One", "Left Leg of the Forbidden One".

That is the text on the card. As you can see, Monster Effects are the only thing that can destroy it. Norus might be vile and wicked, but he is smart. *shivers*

Keep up the good work!

[Dark Sage]

There's another way to get rid of Exodia Necross...

Steal it with Change of Heart (or Snatch Steal, or something like that), and sacrifice it for another Monster.

See, Exodia Necross can't be destroyed by Spell or Trap cards, but cards that do things other than destroy it work just fine. It can be paralyzed by Spellbinding Circle, weakened and paralyzed by Shadow Spell, sent back to the owner's hand by a Penguin Soldier, and a lot of other things. It isn't as indestructable as most people think.

- Venusaur

[Shuppet Master]

Well,since Norus' deck is supposed to be one of the old Spellcaster/Fiend beatdown decks that were being played in the ancient days of Dark Magician and Summoned Skull being the best monsters in existence,I decided to make the guy wicked.

However,it just makes for a good rivalry for the girls if D.G.B. have another adventure in the future(strong hint,not implied ) and it will make for more shock and awe if any twists for him come up(another strong hint,again not implied ).

Don't worry,everyone,I've started writing the final duel of that day,and I promise it will be good and will have an unexpected ending.

[opaltiger]

Doesn't Necross get destroyed if you remove one of the Exodia pieces from the graveyard? If so, Monster Reborn could beat it. And wouldn't Change of Heart etc., not work on it?

[Shuppet Master]

I think that we all know the Monster Reborn strategy for getting rid of Necross, as well as Soul Release, etc.

ATTENTION: My next chapter is up. It's the first of two "Best of Duels, Best of Friends" duels! (Note that, because I used ideas from Mandate's latest chapter, some of the scenarios will change in the revision.) Enjoy!

[starjake]

wow...beth's wimpy weaklings beat Gwen's strong monsters...NEVER underestimate the power of weaker monsters

Well, I couldn't find any ruling problems here...and, though I'm no English teacher, I couldn't see any grammar problems...great job on a very well-written chapter!

[Dark Sage]

*Sob*

I'm glad it's over... that pretty much broke my heart...

But seriously...

Very good. I like the cards that were named after my fanfics, as well as the juxtaposition to the duel between Mary and Jade.

But a few errors...

You had Beth attack with Mokey Mokey King on the round she summoned it. (Sigh...)

Mokey Mokey Smackdown is a Magic Card, not a Trap (Beth should have had it face-up before using it.

Lord of Dragons can't summon two Dragons on his own, as Gwen implied. He needs the Flute of Dragon Summoning card. (Since she didn't use the effect, it makes little difference).

But anyway, good work, and I anticipate the next chapter...

- Venusaur

[opaltiger]

Correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't have Gwen got 1000LP when she used Pot of Greed with Solemn Wishes?

[starjake]

Opaltiger: Nope. Here's the card info for Solemn Wishes.

Solemn Wishes
DB1 - EN174: Common
PSV - 055: Common
Continuous Trap
You gain 500 Life Points when you draw a card (or cards).

As the text says, you gain 500 LP whenever you draw cards, not 500 LP for every card you draw.