Ah, another fic, huh? Good to see you still writing. Nice idea with the Hoppip in the blizzard, and good work with the setting. I like the general concept of this fic. Time will tell if there's a reunion to come, but I can see happy endings either way. I guess we'll just have to wait to see which direction you take this.

I do think that Shane's characterization could have been done slightly better. You mentioned that he didn't know the right word when he wanted to say "nice", but he seemed to know much more complex words when he discussed how he was separated from his mother. That didn't seem to fit very well.

This is a good start, otherwise, though. Even though this'll probably be short, it could really be a heartwarming piece. I'm looking forward to seeing what you can do with it. Anyway, see you next chapter!