Hmm, I think there something about the red-robe person that is hinted in this chapter. It is stated that that person has a Pikachu that thundershocked him, right? Then I have a guess on who he might be.

your right Red robe dose have a Pikachu, however go on take a guess at who Red robe really is.. you never know you maybe right or you may be wrong as to who he really is.

Again, you seem to have problems with the grammar and spelling. For this chapter, I seem to have some problem to understand a few things spoken by the characters. You also seem to miss some dialogue mark and comma usage. And by the way, Ash's Pichu name is Pika, not Pia, right?

that’s true, maybe I should not try to Wright the chapters at night (my time of course) and yes Ash’s Pichu is named Pika, it was a simple typo that can easily be fixed

To me, that is what the fic's weakest point. Hmm, just as a suggestion, but you don't mind if you sent off a chapter earlier to me so that I can edit it, and I sent it back to you to be posted, do you? I can do the job of editing if you want. I'll try to PM an edited version of the first chapter later, and you can tell me what you think.

thank you for being honest about the grammar and spelling being this fic's weak point, thank you for offering to help, but you don’t have to besides you still have your own fanfic to worry about.

But still, the story is going pretty well at this point. I hope that Ash's adventure will start off soon. Anyway, sorry if I seem to stress on a lot on the mistake. I'm sure that those can be fix. Keep improving on your writing skill and continue to post this fic. I'll continue to read this fic. :smilie:

[color=wheat] thank you, I glad you think that this fic id doing good so far, anyways Ash’s journey well start next chapter like I said. That is quite alright, and yes I well try my best to improve on my writing skills and don’t worry I have already have 24 chapters named a few of which I have already started to plan on…

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