Hi there, Charles. I know I have read this already, but I decided that more could be commented on this chapter.

First of all, who could the red robe be? For any ASBer, they might think that it’s you, Charles (look at Cam, the Scepticle :biggrin: ) Anyway, what kind of bond that he shares with Deliah; father, uncle, step-father? He has connection with Suicune, wonder what could that make him then? Also, it’s also quite a strange request for challenging Ash to capture 100 Spearow. Well, Ash did get to keep a shiny Spearow, which is quite okay.

Anyway, just a quick comment on error: be on the look for spelling error. You misspelled “Spearow” as “Sparrow”, and also other words like sure to sheer and stuff like that. Anyway, I proposed to edit your chapter, and I would gladly do that to make your fanfic better to be read. No, don’t get it wrong, your fic has the plot and characters already, but only spelling and grammar get in the way.

Well, I ended up talking a lot. Anyway, three votes on this fic poll… Hm, who else could be reading? Come and reply, readers!

Okay, I might be saying too much. Well, see you soon, Charles!