uh-oh. Well, here goes. Trainer fics are TOO COMMON, and TOO ALIKE, but lets go change things.
Description is important. I DONT KNOW what HAPPNED in that whirlpool...is it some sort of lake at the school? you said 'The dragon MASTER, Lance AND Claire' which contradicts awfully. You then went on to say 'we THREE dragon masters'
Describe what the place is like, what people look like, first impressions of Pokemon and even personal preference with characters. use " instead of ', its eisier on the eyes IMHO.