Ah, the end of Book II! Good to see it here at last. ^_^

Y'know, this was admittedly a filler, since all that happened was that we bridged the gap from the hospital awakening to the end of Lisa's stay. Still, it was good to see Lisa and Gavin (somewhat) okay and able to talk again. Gavin's right; when they began their journeys as Pokemon trainers, they never could've expected this. Good use of their respective disappointments in what their lives have now become.

Maybe I've just come to expect too much from you - that's out of the deep respect I have for your writing, by the way - but this didn't really seem strong enough for this book's conclusion. I'm not sure whether it was because this was a filler, or because it was much shorter than the previous chapter, or because there was some vague weakness in the writing style, but it just seemed weak considering its importance in this epic.

I had a few grammar things to mention, but I think the bigger concern is the strength of this chapter. It seemed a little short, and I thought more could've been made of certain moments. (For instance, I couldn't help but think of the memorable premonition from LVH that was used to such great effect when I saw the part about Lisa's wishful dream. I think that could've been expanded and utilized further.) It just seemed like it could've had a little more.

But still, this was a strong chapter, way better than I would expect from many other writers, myself included. The scene with Paddy was effective, as we really got the full sense of franticness, and it was fairly sobering to see Oak at the end. Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing what you've prepared for Book III! See you then!