War of the Forums

[Mega Horny]

One big problem, Pister. Your dialogue bubbles aren't organized in a way, at least in this comic, that I can tell who's saying what, and in what order.

[mr_pikachu]

Mega: Well, it's generally left-to-right. If there's a major divide between the height of sections, then that's considered a new line. Just like reading a book.

I did notice some difficulties with organizing the dialogue in the early pages; I think it's better later on. Another area in which there's been improvement.

[Gavin Luper]

Bahahaha!

Number 8 was good - pushed the boundaries - but I thought this one, number 9, was hilarious. And relieving, because it explains why you've been stalking me in the 'post the song you're listening to' thread. I actually kept reading those lyrics over and over going, "I know this, I know this, but what the hell is it?" Heh. Ten points for thorough background research.

As for the rest - I'm sure I've never been that cranky, though at least one of the phrases there might have actually come out of my mouth at some point, I'm not sure. Martin's classic "How the hell do you turn this thing off?" was great. And deprecating for me, but it's true I talk too much.

Last thing - the dialogue box for "ARGH! MY VIRGIN EYES!" wasn't that clear. I'm guessing it's meant to be the people in the awards hall being exposed to - er - mr_pikachu's birthday suit, but I also considered that it could have been my character ... just cause I tend to use that phrase occasionally.

Anyway - good work as always, and so entertaining. Keep it up.

[mr_pikachu]

Gavin: Yeah, that definitely pushed the limits. I don't think I'll ever go too far past that. And hurrah! You liked #9! I knew you'd want to see the reason for my stalkiness, but I'm glad the effect worked, as well.

As for the last two panels, maybe it'd make more sense if you considered the "FOR GOD'S SAKE" and "MY VIRGIN EYES" lines to be spoken by someone not pictured. Because they were. I thought the different bubble style conveyed that, but perhaps it didn't... hrm.

[Gavin Luper]

As for the last two panels, maybe it'd make more sense if you considered the "FOR GOD'S SAKE" and "MY VIRGIN EYES" lines to be spoken by someone not pictured. Because they were. I thought the different bubble style conveyed that, but perhaps it didn't... hrm.

Ohhhhhhhhhhh.

Right.

*rereads*

EDIT: Okay, so, that's someone - possibly mistysakura - trying to work out how to turn the video link to mr_pika off; then the audience's eyes being burned out in the next frame. I think. It makes more sense that way. I'm actually slightly confused by the "it's usually so much more impressive than this!" ... I think I've read it wrong.

[mistysakura]

Ohhhhhhhhhhh.

Right.

*rereads*

EDIT: Okay, so, that's someone - possibly mistysakura - trying to work out how to turn the video link to mr_pika off; then the audience's eyes being burned out in the next frame. I think. It makes more sense that way. I'm actually slightly confused by the "it's usually so much more impressive than this!" ... I think I've read it wrong.

Yeah, I read it as me saying "how the hell do you turn this thing off", mr_pika saying "it's usually so much more impressive than this" (a continuation of #8), and someone saying "argh my virgin eyes". That could be me as well, given the same bubble style; however, haven't my virgin eyes been burnt out already by this stage? So I don't know. Yeah, differentiating speakers by bubble style is a touch too subtle. Ideally people shoulnd't be re-reading and matching bubble styles to figure out who's saying what. But I wouldn't have a clue what other way would be better.

[mr_pikachu]

Gavin: Close enough. For the impressiveness part, Ada's post is as good of a summary as I could give.


Ada: Hmm. Maybe that is too subtle.

...

...That might be a problem.

*looks at the completed pages after #9*

*cries*