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16th April 2007, 01:56 AM
#19

Elite Trainer
Re: Symmetry ~ A fic by Samchu and Eevee_Shayna ~ Chapter 5 is up!
Mm, I like how this is going. The description is exquite, without being overly verbose and taking away from plot, characters etc. The personalities of Surai and Layla are being establihsed firmly, and it's nice to see Surai's darker side taking hold. I also like the art, although shading could be improved in places (Chater 3's was good, but Chapter 5's seemed a bit scruffy). Oh yeah, good funeral scene in Chapter 5; the atmosphere was great. Surai does seem a bit contradictory at the moment... if the whole point of her leaving was to keep others from being harmed, why let Layla come? Sure she's very attached to her sister, but surely the harm to be done to Layla outweighs all of Layla's pain and loneliness?
Keep it up.
mistysakura
2007 Golden Pens: Co-winner of Best Poem (Rain Eternal) and Best Reviewer
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Also Keeper of the 'A'ctivator Unown
Brimstone Diamonds. The Artist. Tightrope. Solitude. Autopsy.
Glitter (one-shot).
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Random thought: 2+2=5.
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