Hey DS, I read this chapter through. I did read some of pokemonese before this but I wasn't a fully fledged fan. Anyway.
It was a cool prologue. The way you introduced The Twisting was quite interesting, like something from a horror movie. You effectively established this mysterious thing at the beginning which was good. I hope to learn more about it soon. But there was a slight 'movie promo' feel to it which confused me somewhat.
Having Ishmael's son is what I would call a staple rule of sequels = it always features characters children :p But Starbuck seems like a mature young man (I forget how old he is?) but also one slightly disturbed by his father's dissapearence.
One thing I did notice, something that did spoil it for me: you seemed to go out of your way to make reference to almost everything thats ever happened in Pokemon. What with all the Team references, the numerous Legendary references, Pokemon Rangers, Shadow Pokemon, Wes, Michael....I don't know, it seemed like an encyclopedia of Pokemon which was a bit odd. Just how much can one person know about every different reigon? It did make it stand out as Pokemon Fanfiction (which is never a bad thing: after all, isn't that what this forum is for?) but at the same time seemed to tarnish the quality somewhat.
Either way, you have established this Percy character as an aspiring and powerful character. Evidently he has history with Starbuck, and I am intrigued by the next chapter.
I shall keep an eye out.