Sorry for not replying in a while. I did think the last chapter was good, it opened up a new selection of ideas. I forgot Lisa would be Starbuck's mother. I wasn't expecting to hear about her so quickly, and I certainly wasn't expecting to find a plate so soon.

I do wonder, since there are 16 plates how original this will be kept. How varied the format can be. Whatever the case, 16 is a big number so watch out for repetition or repeating ideas.

I did re-read it as per your suggestion to another readers reply, but I'm still not quite sure how it would be an advantage letting Scully lose and subsequently lose the Splash Plate. Surely they couldn't predict just how Starbuck would react - what if he had killed Scully trying to learn the truth, would it still be worth it just so he could confront C-Note Pete?

Despite my questions I enjoyed it. You're beginning to put more description in battles but it still feels very in-game orientated (in that its attack - reaction - attack - reaction) and that does make the matches quite mechanic and predictable.

Shadow was an interesting character, too. Will she be the Lisa to Starbuck's Ishmael, or will she leave when she has found out what she wants? Keeping her there may strike too many paralellisms (sp?) to your last fic, so watch out: the last thing you need in a sequel is unoriginality.


See you next chapter!