You've already heard my feedback, Dave. And I get a fair amount of the Zelda-knowledge credit, thank you

Since I've told you all the things I like already, Dave, such as Nether Amalgam's awesome name, the Metroid reference, and Culstin being my user character, I'm going to tell you what I didn't like. These little things were sparce, and very picky of me to find, but there's always gotta be something wrong ;0

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The two swords pushed and ground at one another, sparks flying from their blades as they repelled one another.
One another twice in one sentence. Just doesn't flow, IMO.

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...sat a red freight car with some sort of a face sculpted into one end of the car.[/SIZE]
Same thing here. Car twice.

The only other thing that I didn't like was Roy picking the piece of holographic metal out of his hair. A cool concept, and a nice way to sneak in a description of his hair, but, I don't really follow how some holographic can be touched. Of course, the holograms seem to be able to bring pain upon the duelists when they attack directly anyway, so I guess the entire concept is illogical, not the story. Anyway, great stuff man.


...glad I thought of it ¬¬'