Chris: That was sad and biting. I could feel where you were coming from. I thought the rhyming worked really well too - and the title sounds like the title of a rock song.

Tara: Aw, that should have been too short to make me feel anything, but it melted me a bit. Gotta love keeping it simple! It works a treat: and when you read it quickly, the title rhymes with the last line, which I liked. God it was sad. Nice work!