I'm all for helping out other writers, so Here you go.

1. You don't have to keep the subject "bumped" just search for it if it gets off the front page. On the bottom are the search options.

2. Don't apologize for not being able to post. We all understand that you have a life, and things may come up that may bar you from posting, it's cool.

3. Now on to your fic. I enjoy the character, and am glad that you've decided to go the path of making sure that you develop him, but that yields a few problems...

a. This makes your fic less exciting than most of the ones we've seen. I understand, Characterization slows down things a little. The say to avoid having your reader lose interest could be to introduce some supporting cast or letting the reader glean his nature from his actions, e.g., Si left his school a while ago, and stole a pokemon, but what happened next? I promise that we will understand how evil his yami is if he does evil things and you tell us some of his malevolent thoughts. We won't forget if you stop telling us that he's evil, which brings my next point...

b. Redundancy is a problem in this story. You don't have to say everything that happened more than twice at the most like this...

...After those increments of time had passed, the eighth grade classes were let out to go to their next classes. Doors that locked the students of the eighth grade within their classrooms for forty five minutes swung open to admit the pouring scores of eighth graders into the hallway...
Don't pummel your readers with the same information, it helps keep the pace good, and that keeps interest.

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Don't be discouraged, I'm just trying to help. I enjoy your story, and I will continue to read it, but if you personally want to become better, having people tell you their unbiased opions is one of your best tools, that, and practice. Also, it's not like I'm Hemingway, Whitman, or Dumas. I use the same advice that I have given you, and am always open for more.

~Legend~