Augh! No more LVH?! *cry cry cry* I loved that series, too! Oh, well... I'm sure you'll make this every bit as good as the Lapras Valley High series was!

I hate to make any critical points to a brand new fic, based on one of the great ones, but I do have a few things to point out. Firstly (and least importantly), there were one or two normal typos in there, just changing words like "they" to "the", etc. Those really aren't too big of a problem. What could really be better, though, is the use of punctuation. There are many cases, for instance, when a comma to break up a sentence would have been prudent. In addition, there were times at the end of some quotes where there was no punctuation used or a mark that seemed a bit inappropriate for the situation. However, I must commend you: Your writing style, as usual, is superb, and you've done a great job of adapting this as a non-Pokemon fic. Keep it up!

I'm still sad that LVH is gone, though... *sob* Well, I guess it just wasn't meant to be. Anyway, keep going with this project! It looks great so far!