The beginning, I will say, is very interesting. The prologue is written in more of a blurb form so you may just want to call it a summery of the fic instead of a prologue. And the beginning lines of the chapter were very good, I actually believed the fic started from halfway into the story, which would have been quite an interesting startoff. It is still interesting, you've let us know quite well that its not a typical trainer fic although it does lack paragraphing and description and characterization. But thumbs up because its such an unusual start. You've got me reading now![]()
Good work. And oh yeah, Houndin sounds soooo cute!!!!!
~Mist