Aagh! I'm so sorry for not replying sooner! I've only had a few minutes of free time these last few days, so I haven't really come on here much. Stupid midterm... anyway, I saw this up and I'm been dying to read it! It looks very good, although there were two errors I caught:
Just minutes after midnight, however, what looked like a shooting start shot across the star-studded blackness of the night.
It should be "a shooting star", not start.
The air outside was a bit brisk, as was the gentle wind---a definite sign that Autumn was approaching swiftly.
The word autumn should not be capitalized... I think... dang Spanish has got me all mixed up...
Anyway, this was a powerful chapter, even though it was short. Mewtwo's personality seems to have grown a little warmer, whereas Ash, as always, is concerned for his friends. And what's with Mewtwo? This is getting freaky... especially since it's the same sort of thing that happened in my fic! PLAGAIRIST! YOU MUST DIE!!Anyway, this was very good, and don't worry, I've had a bit of writer's block myself. Keep this up, it's very exciting!
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