ooh, nice start! i especially like the little add-in detail of drinking alcohol at 17 not really being a crime, lol. whatever this big case is, it must be kinda ugly, making Walkers cry and all. i've got some suspicions on that walkers character but perhaps i'm reading too far into this. in fact, that's usually the case >_<. oh well, it's fun to have impossible theories! a well-written start underworld, nice paragraphing and you seem to have a good handle on this writing style.