Ok...pretty good start. You are doing ok.Um first you should make your chapters a bit longer and full fo description. It sounds original so far with the idea of already having a poke and regeristing. Then the idea of 18 gyms. That is a lot and haven't seen any fic with 18 gyms so this is going to be a long fic and thats good if you keep right on track with the length and description and keep readers intrested. This is in first person and thats good to see only a few fics I can see with first perosn. Hope this helped if you need mroe go to the writers lounge and go to the thread about writing a good trainer fic and that should help some more. Keep it up!