This is a pretty good start! Chapter was pretty good length and description was good. This is different and isn't one of the loving or continuing on Misty, Brock, Ash kind of fics. But th ebest part is you made a mystery of Ash vanishing which is great and having Gary in there being Brock's friend is cool. I think the whole Ash dissappearing act could have been a little bit more longer and described a bit more. Why his mom die? Sickness? Murder? That might just be me but it made me wonder. Other than that, good. Keep it up!