Well, your warning is both a good action on your behalf - avoiding icky law suits from offended readers, you know ^^'' - and a giant spoiler, of course, for the fic itself. But, I came to realize the title, as well as your sig, give this information away too. So, a warned man counts for two, and I'll see how I feel when that plot line comes to... "blossom", quote your sig.
I already feel I'm looking for signs of this future bond in this first chapter (and now I'm convinced I found some), but I think that, though awkward as I may feel by it, it could really make for an interesting story. Though I know for myself I will be more likely to continue reading if this plot line stays a heartsome story and doesn't tilt into something else. Not that the rest of the story can't contain any goor for me to enjoy it, though! ^^''
Ooh, and as far as spelling and grammar issues, I didn't found anything bothering me. Only: you should edit the part where the starter Pokémon are described, because your Conblazea is definitely not a water Pokémon, huh?
Anyhow, onto the rest of the story. You make a great deal of setting up the general world of your story in this first chapter, and it works! I suppose you could complain it feels cramped, but then again: you're using this chapter to set up the world the story plays in, and the background of the protagonists.
I think you're doing great in describing the technology that's part of this world, and as for your custom Pokémon, be sure to describe them in detail if they don't (remotely) resemble anything from real life.
I actually felt connected to Jacen right away, but that's because I imagined "me" (in an unwritten fanfic) ending up waking up in the forest, having ended up in the Pokémon World from our world some how, and still in my pyjamas.But that's just as a side-note; you have to admit though: coincidentally, we both ended up with PokéBall themed hats. (see sig)
Now I want to go buy a PDX and holovision from eBay...![]()