~ A Trainer's Love ~

[Crystalmaster Mike]

Well, your warning is both a good action on your behalf - avoiding icky law suits from offended readers, you know ^^'' - and a giant spoiler, of course, for the fic itself. But, I came to realize the title, as well as your sig, give this information away too. So, a warned man counts for two, and I'll see how I feel when that plot line comes to... "blossom", quote your sig.
I already feel I'm looking for signs of this future bond in this first chapter (and now I'm convinced I found some), but I think that, though awkward as I may feel by it, it could really make for an interesting story. Though I know for myself I will be more likely to continue reading if this plot line stays a heartsome story and doesn't tilt into something else. Not that the rest of the story can't contain any goor for me to enjoy it, though! ^^''
Ooh, and as far as spelling and grammar issues, I didn't found anything bothering me. Only: you should edit the part where the starter Pokémon are described, because your Conblazea is definitely not a water Pokémon, huh?

Anyhow, onto the rest of the story. You make a great deal of setting up the general world of your story in this first chapter, and it works! I suppose you could complain it feels cramped, but then again: you're using this chapter to set up the world the story plays in, and the background of the protagonists.
I think you're doing great in describing the technology that's part of this world, and as for your custom Pokémon, be sure to describe them in detail if they don't (remotely) resemble anything from real life.

I actually felt connected to Jacen right away, but that's because I imagined "me" (in an unwritten fanfic) ending up waking up in the forest, having ended up in the Pokémon World from our world some how, and still in my pyjamas. But that's just as a side-note; you have to admit though: coincidentally, we both ended up with PokéBall themed hats. (see sig)

Now I want to go buy a PDX and holovision from eBay...

[ShadowPikachu]

Well, your warning is both a good action on your behalf - avoiding icky law suits from offended readers, you know ^^'' - and a giant spoiler, of course, for the fic itself.

Heh - that was my first thought - that and offended readers chasing me with torches and pitchforks. ^__^

But, I came to realize the title, as well as your sig, give this information away too. So, a warned man counts for two, and I'll see how I feel when that plot line comes to... "blossom", quote your sig.

Yep, that was the plan - get out a subliminal warning in the sig & title and then a small warning at the beginning of the fic.

I already feel I'm looking for signs of this future bond in this first chapter (and now I'm convinced I found some),

You very likely have found some.

but I think that, though awkward as I may feel by it, it could really make for an interesting story. Though I know for myself I will be more likely to continue reading if this plot line stays a heartsome story and doesn't tilt into something else. Not that the rest of the story can't contain any goor for me to enjoy it, though! ^^''

Well, I hope you'll enjoy it as it develops.

Ooh, and as far as spelling and grammar issues, I didn't found anything bothering me. Only: you should edit the part where the starter Pokémon are described, because your Conblazea is definitely not a water Pokémon, huh?

Nope, not a water pokemon, but it is a fish - a fish that swims in lava. ^^" More on Conblazea in a future chapter (as an opponent - Jacen won't be pulling an Ash ^__^ )

Anyhow, onto the rest of the story. You make a great deal of setting up the general world of your story in this first chapter, and it works! I suppose you could complain it feels cramped, but then again: you're using this chapter to set up the world the story plays in, and the background of the protagonists.

Yeah, tried to make it flow the best I could and make it with just enough detail to set up the world and their backgrounds, while not overloading it and making it too boring.

I think you're doing great in describing the technology that's part of this world, and as for your custom Pokémon, be sure to describe them in detail if they don't (remotely) resemble anything from real life.

Yeah, basically, if I just mention one of my custom Pokemon, there'll be a general description (like the starters in the chapter), but when they are actually encountered, they'll get much the same descriptive treatment as Ralts did this chap.

I actually felt connected to Jacen right away, but that's because I imagined "me" (in an unwritten fanfic) ending up waking up in the forest, having ended up in the Pokémon World from our world some how, and still in my pyjamas. But that's just as a side-note; you have to admit though: coincidentally, we both ended up with PokéBall themed hats. (see sig)

I can see why you felt the connection to Jacen right away, and hope others will get a similar one. Heh- yeah, we did end up with similar themed hats.

Now I want to go buy a PDX and holovision from eBay...

Boy what I would give for one of those holovisions.

Well, thanks for taking the time to review, and I hope you'll enjoy future installments.

~ShadowPikachu