Martin: see, shameless plugging does work! Thanks for replying, and thanks heaps especially for the comments. Mm, actually the end does seem a bit out of place. It sounded perfectly fine in my head... maybe I'll just end it with a repeat of the starting bit, that would be more fitting and haunting. Actually... I just thought of something I could do! Cool. Yeah a bit more dynamics and contrast would be good too. I think the female voice suits the music better, but for the lyrics I don't know. It is supposed to be about war and all that, but I see they're really soft for that anyway.

Gavin: Thanks for replying without shameless plugging! Mm, the music would need a different spin for a male voice, yes. I'd probably make it more direct and use no layering. About the volume of the vocals, I could actually fix that easily; the software does let me do that (I cheated most of the dynamics, hehe).

... I didn't think it was that great an achievement... people write songs all the time...