Translation Help Thread

[Gavin Luper]

I initially went ahead and interpreted this as requesting a translation from French to English, so I have posted the below to suggest how I would translate your French lines into English:

La beauté aux cheveux rouges Maarit
The red haired beauty, Maarit
Au milieu du rêve elle est ma Maarit
In the middle of the dream, she is my Maarit
Aussi bien gentille que jolie Maarit
As kind as she is pretty, Maarit
Ce nomme je chuchote au vent
This name I whisper to the wind

However, I just reread your post and it seems clearer that you were looking for help with rewriting the French lines to match the English ones ... is that right?

If so, it mostly looks fine to me, except for the "si je vante" line. It should be "ses cheveux", not "les cheveux". But the "me" you highlighted in yellow is correct.

Hope this helps in some way.

[Mikachu Yukitatsu]

However, I just reread your post and it seems clearer that you were looking for help with rewriting the French lines to match the English ones ... is that right?

Yes I was, thanks for the help! For some odd reason, I have constantly had dreams about my French teacher's daughter (FYI, not my red-haired crush, my life's only date with her was almost exactly 10 years ago) recently.

I'll leave word 'French' there for some time, still, so I might get more opinions.

La beauté aux cheveux rouges Maarit
I also thought avec would fit here but thought it would sound stupid.

Au milieu du rêve elle est ma Maarit
I think it's just an indefinite dream, not THE dream. But I think you can't say it in French in any other way than du rêve because there's a genitive expression involved.

Ce nomme je chuchote au vent
A preposition issue again. There are much less of those little things in Finnish, only like in

ennen sotaa
before war

not in

tuuleen
to the wind

where it's shown by using a case called the illative.

Also, you must have noticed from my way to post that Finnish usually makes absolutely no difference between the English articles a, an and the.