Poor Charmander! Shot with a Pokeball. He'll bruise. I liked that idea.

I think you're doing a good job, and as I said on MSN maybe more panels might be worth looking into? Since not much is happening as of yet. I also wondered if you'd considered text-panels as a narrative form, or bars of text in the panels to say things like "Charles had a special gun made by ___ which fired Pokeballs" or something?

I just thought it would be cool. Anyway good luck with the fic!