YAY I finally read the other chapter. Partially cos I was pretty lazy the last month, partially cos I only just noticed it was up.
I enjoyed it. It was shortish, but sweet. I was in the moment the entire way through. I love the use of short sentences, and I could feel the fear that "protagonist" was feeling. I wish he had a name, just so I knew what to call him!
Can we call him Jimbo?