You know, out of all the time I've seen you around, I think I've only really read the first two chapters of PADS, and that's it. Mind you, I've read those several times though :-)
But yeah, onto this now.
I liked it. You had enough description to not be telling me the story, and it moved quick enough so I didn't get lost in the words. I really like the pace of this, its fast and interesting :-) Yeah. Either way, I'm intrigued to see what happens next so, good job
Hopefuly other people come and check this out too cos it deserves more readers than just me!